With the Captains suffering casualties and heavy injuries on their side, all hope seemed to be lost... until Shinji Hirako appeared, along with the rest of the former Shinigami. Though the aid of the Vizards certainly helped to draw the battle in their favor, it seemed Aizen's power alone proved too much for them.
-------------------- General Information --------------------
Name: Grim Crusaeder Actual Age: 217 Appearing Age: 21 Gender: Male Race: AdjucHas Rank:Privaron Espada Number: 107
Appearance
Grim Crusaeder is 5'9" tall,tanned skin,he has white spicy hair.He wights 198 Pounds.His face is fully covered by a human skull,you can see only his deep blue eyes.He wears a black shirt with the inscription 107 written with white on his back.He wears the Arrancar's official bottoms and shoes. His Sword is positioned on his back,being a black-red katana.
Personality
He is usually a calm person,but when somebody challenges him,he attacks without hesitating at full power.His only reason to fight is to prove himself that he can be the strongest Arrancar,and become one of the Espada.Hes strong,fast and intelligent,he doesn't throw himself in a fight without a plan.He may appear that he just jumps in a fight when somebody challenges him,but he can fin a plan very fast.
History
He was born in 1793,as a human,in a tiny village of China.When he was 7,his village was destroyed by a Hollow.He found a Katana,and without knowing anything about Hollows,he attacked it.Being only 7,he had almost no power so the hollow killed him.After he died,a Shinigami found him,and sent him to Soul Society.After 30 years,he learned Shikai,and almost learned Bankai,but when he was in a mission in Hueco Mundo,him and his team was atatcked by a group of Menos Grande.They had no other option then running,but an Adjucas found them.After being injured by a group of Menos Grande,they were killed by the Adjucas. Because of the Reiatsu Grim had,he took control of the Adjucas.Unfortunately he couldn't remember anything,at the age of 216,he became an Espada,and later he was replaced at age of 217 became a Privaron Espada.
-------------------- Skills --------------------
Skills
Swordsmanship- Intermediate
Cero - Advanced
SonÃdo - Advanced
Hand to Hand - Intermediate
Attributes
Speed - Advanced
Power - Advanced
Stamina - Intermediate
Intelligence - Intermediate
-------------------- Powers --------------------
Natural Powers
Cero
Garganta
Bala
Pesquisa
Arrancar Abilities
Assault
Description of the Attack - It's like Shunpo + Cero.When he uses this skill,he teleports having in his hand already a Cero ready to be shot,at a very close range.
Type - Physical
Range - 0-1 Meters the Cero,1-30 Meters the "Shunpo" skill.
Limitation - Making a Cero in less than a second and using in the same time a type of Shunpo takes almost 1/4 of his Reiatsu,using this skill only when the enemy is already tired,and couldn't resist a Cero close,ending the fight quick.
Punishment
Description of Attack - Pointing his sword at the enemy,he creates a small black ball,that when it's shot,it's very fast,and it's power is equals with 3/4 of a normal Cero.
Type - Physical
Range - 0-35 Meters
Limitation - Because of the time it takes making a Punishment,Grim uses it very rare,only when he's fighting strong but slow opponent's.
Slaughter
Description of Attack - He uses a Shunpo like skill,teleporting next to the opponent.Then he grabs the opponents neck and Zanpakuto and uses his left power to fire from each hand a Cero,causing very big damage to the opponent and to himself.
Type - Physical
Range - 0-0 the Cero's, 1-35 the "Shunpo"
Limitation - Because the attack damages Grim too,he only uses when the enemy is very strong and quick,using it only once per fight so he can still have enough power to release his Zanpakuto.
When using the ressureccion form ,the White Human Skull transforms into a Black Dragon skull,his bottom body transforms into a Bone Tail,Bone wings start growing from his back,his chest transforms into Ribs,his hands transform into two big 90cm long and 30 w swords,the only human part ,and the only weakness is his head under the black dragon skull.
Abilities
Pure Cero
Description of Attack - Between his ribs,he concentrates his Reiatsu into a white ball,teleporting next to the enemy and grabbing him with his arms(when he uses this attack,his swords transform in tow bone arms with sharp claws),and pushing him between his Ribs,into the white ball,with the power to destroy an Espada in his human form,or making a lot of damage to an Espada in his Relase form.
Type - Physical
Range - 0-0 The Pure Cero's range,1-100 Teleportation range
Limitation - It takes up to 3 Minutes to create the ball,in this time he has to defend from the enemy attacks with only 1/3 if his Reiatsu,2/3 being used at the creation of the ball.
Deathbringer
Description of Attack - Spinning like a Tornado in the direction of the opponent,with his head towards him,he creates a rupture in space/time into his mouth , being able to fire a black small ray,that can cut through space/time ,cutting also through the enemy.
Type - Physical
Range - 0-35
Limitation - This move uses 2/3 of his Reiatsu and makes him unable to transform back into his human form until he regains his Reiatsu,and making him unable to use any of his attacks,except Cero and his Swords.
OOC Information
-------------------- Sample Post --------------------
It was a cold,dark night in Soul Society.Grim could feel that something terrible is going to happen to him and his team that night.Watching the Red Moon,Grim got announced by a Hell Butterfly that him and his team were going to be sent in Hueco Mundo to kill an Adjucas that stole Vital information from Soul Society. When they got into Hueco Mundo,they got attacked by a group of Menos Grande.They ran because they had no other option.While they were trying to escape,they found the Adjcuas that stole information from Soul Society.Being injured by the Menos Grande,they had no chance in the fight with the Adjucas. Over years,the Reiatsu of Grim took control of the Adjucas,later becoming an Espada and then a Privaron Espada. Now he seeks to become more powerful and to prove to himself that he is the strongest Espada.
-------------------- Rules and Guide Agreement --------------------
Have you read the full rules of this site, including Xat rules, and understand them? Y
Have you read through the Arrancar Application Guide? Y
I don't understand. What kind of spice is in his hair? Why don't you know how to use the spacebar after commas and periods? How can his face be covered by a human skull? Arrancar lose large portions of their masks. I'm sorry, you don't read Bleach, do you?
Personality
Should just replace this with the word, "None."
History
Yeah, uh, he wouldn't be able to SEE the hollow. When the hollow killed him, he wouldn't go to Soul Society. He would turn into a hollow. I'm sorry, it's ok, you're so special and have contributed to the board so much with this mess of terrible grammar and spelling, I'll let it slide. Oh, and of course he almost had bankai. We just pass that out all the time here.
Oh, obviously he was strong enough to take control of a hollow then become and arrancar. And then he just became an espada. How wonderful.
Abilities
Assault Yes, because we just love the teleportation powers and we're totally going to give that to you. Oh, I assume that he could kill someone with this? Someone of any tier? Like Ulquiorra, who is Almighty Level Weak in Segunda Etapa? That's not gonna fly. Denied.
Punishment So it's a black bala. No.
Slaughter Yes, you're so special we're going to allow you the power to teleport.
Resurreccion
Name Riiiiiight no.
Zanpakuto What the hell does a dragon skull look like?
Appearance Right, um, denied because everything is armor and his only weakness is under a nonexistent skull. Dragon's don't exist. HOW SHOULD WE KNOW WHAT THEY LOOK LIKE?
Abilities
Pure Cero Denied. You can't dictate what RANK it's able to kill, much less have an outright fatal power.
Deathbringer Yes, because we're totally letting you cut through the space time continuum. Denied.
Sample Post
Um, no. Not a chance. That's not even what role playing looks like. I suggest you go back to writing fanfiction.
Guess i totally failed...But still...you're mean.I guess i just let my imagination fly away too much... Btw,never heard that everyone is special on their own way? And the dragon skull thing,search on google o.o,is that too hard? tinyurl.com/39yehsk And seriously,you have no imagination?Dragons don't exist,but im sure that there are plenty of Hollows that look like Dragons. And no,i don't read bleach,i watch it. And for crying out loud...I forgot to say that only his eyes and nose were covered with that human skull... Can't really see where my grammar problems are,and i'm not from a country where we speak english anyway. The name is Grim Crusaeder,NOTE: Grimmjow has 2*m. And I really had no idea that i had to use a space after every comma ...
Assault Yes, because we just love the teleportation powers and we're totally going to give that to you. Oh, I assume that he could kill someone with this? Someone of any tier? Like Ulquiorra, who is Almighty Level Weak in Segunda Etapa? That's not gonna fly. Denied.
Yes,we do love teleportation ^'^ As for what I know,Ulquiorra can teleport too,so he could dodge that hit easy,and as I said,it uses it very rare.
Punishment So it's a black bala. No.
No,no it isn't,I said it takes some time,and Bala shots in less than a second.
History Yeah, uh, he wouldn't be able to SEE the hollow. When the hollow killed him, he wouldn't go to Soul Society. He would turn into a hollow. I'm sorry, it's ok, you're so special and have contributed to the board so much with this mess of terrible grammar and spelling, I'll let it slide. Oh, and of course he almost had bankai. We just pass that out all the time here.
Oh, obviously he was strong enough to take control of a hollow then become and arrancar. And then he just became an espada. How wonderful.
Hmm from what I knew,you transform in a hollow when a hollow eats you,and i wrote Killed him,not Ate him Yes,yes he would be able to see Hollows,remember?there are Humans that can see Hollows,not clear but still they can say that there is something there.
Yes,he would almost have Bankai over years.Yes he could take control of him OVER years.Arrancar and Espada,yes he would be able to become an espada,but again,OVER years,not just like the blink of an eye.
Pure Cero Denied. You can't dictate what RANK it's able to kill, much less have an outright fatal power.
I didn't dictate,i said it could be able,as from what i know,some espada are kinda weak,there are difference of power between two espada.
Sample Post Um, no. Not a chance. That's not even what role playing looks like. I suggest you go back to writing fanfiction.
Hmm,I might have a short memory,but im sure it wrote,Sample Post,not Role play sample post.
Other than that,I really love how sarcastic you can be. And no offence,but from what i knew,moderetors are suposed to be nice with new people on the forum,not sarcastic,mean and from a mistake tell them that they have no canche on a forum like this.It's my first time doing this so yeah,i'm not perfect so i can make perfect characters and other,im just learning... But seriously was it even needed to be that rude?
Last Edit: Jul 8, 2010 10:12:14 GMT -5 by hawk5005
And yes, it is incredibly hard to search on google because, if you read our guides, you would know that we require much more effort on the application than you have put forth. Even on the actual template, it says you need a minimum of 2-3 paragraphs for personality and appearance, and 3-5 paragraphs for history.
You would not have received a 'mean review' had you been able to abide by our rules at the least. Obviously you have not.
Just because Ulquiorra could do it, Ulquiorra, who is ALMIGHTY LEVEL on this site, doesn't mean that your character could. Your character, at best, would be looking at Mid Level Weak if this was anywhere close to acceptable.
I'm under no obligation to be nice to people who can't do so much as edit their application when given a review, nor read the rules, nor so much as acknowledge the guidelines on the template. Those are the requirements for new players, and those who do not are likely to receive a trash review, depending on how much their application shows it.
As for the sample post issue, read the Sample Post Guide. There are links to all of these guides on the left side of the board.
Post by Shinigami Kyra on Jul 10, 2010 1:26:34 GMT -5
As Head Administrator of this board, I stand by Wicked's judgement of this application. We receive countless applications on a monthly to weekly basis where players are simply far too lazy to read the rules, the Guidelines, nor the Templates that are basically explained in full for them (as well as provided with links to their respective Application Guide).
The Original Poster did not send me a Private Message, another member of the board as done so. Nevertheless, I will state here for all to see, the reasons in which why this board is moderated differently.
1. By no obligation are we noted to be 'nice.' We'll be as helpful as we can, however, we will not sugarcoat. There's a point where we can provide Constructive Criticism, but that is the closest you will more likely than not receive from the staff. None of us are paid for our position, and a good portion of us are older whom currently have full time jobs in order to pay for our living conditions, whatever they may be.
As such, our staff hold a certain level of maturity (despite their age), and to that point, we expect players to uphold an equivalent level of maturity. Maturity includes reading and understanding the rules and, if you do not understand something, will ask us questions in order to better prepare your application for acceptance.
60% to 80% of our applications thus far have upheld the 'failure to comply' response simply due to a lack of reading the rules. The rules are placed there for a reason, and the Application Guide is there to help you create the best possible application that meets our requirements; that's what the Sample Application section is also for. It is now a requirement to read and understand the Guide of the specified race in which you are applying for. When we come across an application that seems to not only not meet the standards in which we have set for this site, but hold obvious flaws in their application that could have been adjusted by simply a double-check or a simple review of the specified Application Guide, we are not obligated to hold your hand, nor be nice to you in order for your application to be approved. If people are too ignorant to either read over the rules, or ask questions when they don't understand a specified section of the Application guide, then how fair is that to us, as moderation staff members? How fair is that to players who put in the effort and actually take their time to read over the rules more than just once in under to fully understand them, ask questions when they don't understand something, and so forth? Quite frankly, I feel it's a big 'slap in the face' when people don't take the time to read over the rules and fully understand them.
None of what you've provided thus far has met any sort of 'length requirements' alone! They're written in the Application Template! I may understand every now and then, someone missing something in the Guide, but the length requirements are Written Straight In The Guide. For someone to miss something like that (they HAD to have ignored it due to having to 'delete' it in order to provide their own information, which you have done) is, as stated, a slap in the face to the person who has spent their time and hard work in creating not only the Guides and Information for Applications on the board, but to the moderation staff as a whole. It's a waste of our time to review an application that has been so terribly ignorant of the Guide and Template information.
I suggest reading over our Guides and Templates, reading over the rules, and so forth. We may not 'appear' nice, but that is due to the quality of players in which we hold on this board, which leads to the reason why our bar may be set higher than others.
If you do not like the way this board is run, no one is twisting your arm to fill out an application. No one is 'required' to be 'anything' on the internet, especially on a forum-based website. Despite this being a Forum-Based Role Playing Website, there are not set requirements in accordance to how the staff must act. Yes, they're 'expected' to act nice, but not all of them do, especially toward people who are ignorant of rules that they themselves HAD to have seen due to having to delete them in order to replace that field for their own information.
Moved to denied due to having teleportation, fatal powers, and not meeting the minimum requirements, nor reading or understanding the rules. There really isn't any aspect of this application that is acceptable.
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