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Post by Wicked on Nov 28, 2010 22:07:28 GMT -5
Please use the correct template found directly beneath the guide you copied/pasted. Not off to a good start, buddy, not at all.
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Post by Wicked on Nov 28, 2010 22:19:50 GMT -5
It's not concern, it's a rule. You're not the only person who's been called out by a staff; stop making a scene and lose the overinflated ego. If it bothers you so much, work on word, notepad, or any other program.
And if you'd take the time to look next to the post, it says my screen name and it says my gender. Nice observation.
Lastly, do not reply unless the application is complete.
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Post by yuukiterumi on Dec 2, 2010 18:26:20 GMT -5
Arrancar Application [/b][/center] In Character
-------------------- General Information-------------------- Name: Yuuki Terumi Actual Age: 375 years old Appearing Age: 37 Gender: Male Race: Numero Number: 19 Appearance Yuuki has a....strange appearance, he stands an average 5'5 and weighs in at lean 205 lbs.He isn't overly muscular like say Yammy but is respectably well toned. He has a perpetually messy mop of green hair which comes down to his gray eyes, his nose is a little small. His skin is a pale but gray. He always has a smirk on his face and is a little jittery. He wears what appears to be a black fur coat, although what the skin once belonged to is anyone's guess he has no shirt on underneath and it reveals his Hollow hole which is right in the middle of his pectorals. He has a necklace of beads around his neck and wears tight black leather pants, adorned with a black belt that has a large silver skull belt buckle. He wears black cow boy boots for his shoes. His zanpakto (a Kusari-gama) is tucked into his belt while the long chain is wrapped around his right arm. He has a red tear drop mark beneath his right eye. Finally his numero tattoo is on the palm of his right hand. His mask fragment is over his left eye, there is a hold for him to see through and the shape is similar to a small flame that twists up and off to the side of his head.
Personality Yuuki is a bit of a nut to say the least, he throws himself at all challenges with 100% effort and doesn't care about the cost to himself or others. He has trouble holding back in battle because of this and isn’t the person you would send to bring someone back alive or anything that isn’t going to end up with someone getting
Yuuki is a masochist, the scars on his body are self inflicted in a ritual cutting he does before every battle, he believes it brings him luck. He will allow enemy attacks to cut him by only partially dodging them he loves the feeling of his own blood flowing and doesn’t consider an opponent worth fighting if he doesn’t think they can make him bleed
Yuuki is a strange kind of person in that he can be smart and manipulative but always for the reason of trying to find a good fight, or to increase his own strength. He can be almost shockingly smart when trying to get his own way but with the complete lack of care for his safety you would think he was some kind of idiot savant.
Yuuki does not care even remotely about others safety if Aizen had assigned him subordinates he would have been as likely to kill them as the soul reapers, just to keep himself entertained
Yuuki does not care at all about anything not related to battle that research and development of arrancar, shinigami and such could not be a bigger bore, and the only way that the arrancar researchers can get him to use any of their technology is to convince him that it will make him strong or let him kill people easier
You would swear Yuuki has ADD. He cannot sit still to save his life. He is always twitching or walking in place, or contorting strangely, it is nearly impossible to get him to pay attention to anything and it wasn’t uncommon for people to have to address him 2-3 times before he started to pay attention
History Human: Yuuki Terumi was a bit of a freak, he was an adrenaline junkie and a regular junkie as well. He did dirt bike racing, street and drift racing, cage fighting, sky diving, and any other thing he could to keep himself moving. He was frequently high on speed or any other concoction that would make him move. He was a punk with nothing going for him. He was killed in a drug deal that went bad and was shot. Thus began his life as a plus (Yuuki doesn’t remember his human life but his name returned to him upon becoming an Arrancar)
Plus Soul: This was one of the most frustrating times of Yuuki’s life, or death rather. He was bound to the drug dealer that had shot him but the bastard never did anything! He was either cruising around in his car selling off his stock to the neighborhood and sitting around watching television and eating pizza. How could he stand being so lazy it drove Yuuki insane, literally. Through a combination of being forced to sit on his hands for months and not being able to get his drugs Yuuki was quite crazy by the time his Chain of Fate finally ate open the hollow hole in his chest, funny thing was Yuuki liked the chain because the pain of its encroachment was the only thing that felt real to him and he began to relish each occurrence, he briefly wondered what would happen once the chain was gone but quickly banished the thoughts from his head. When it finally did happen the Yuuki as the human world knew him disappeared completely and became a Hollow.
Hollow: When Yuuki reformed as a Hollow all he could feel now was the hunger, not for the drugs and the action that he so loved when he was a human but for human souls. Yuuki’s Hollow form was much like the legendary Naga, from the waist up the Hollow was roughly human shaped but down from their his body tapered into a snake tail allowing Yuuki (or as he was known as a Hollow; Blood Fang) to slither around at high speeds. Although he wasn’t able to enjoy the irony in his new near mindless form one of the first soul he devoured was the soul of the drug dealer who killed him, who had been gunned down himself mere hours before Yuuki had reformed as Blood Fang. Blood Fang returned to Hueco Mundo for the first time after devouring the dealer’s soul and found the place crawling with monsters just like him, he experienced some primordial sense of belonging and began to slither around killing other hollows. About 6 months after becoming a Hollow Blood Fang’s journeys to the world of the living ceased, the souls of humans could no longer fill the emptiness inside him, they weren’t powerful enough. So he began to devour the Hollows he had been arbitrarily killing since arriving in Hueco Mundo, this was much for satisfying to him then the Plus souls of humans and began a wholesale slaughter of any Hollows he came across. One day Blood Fang came across a veritable sea of food, hundreds upon hundreds of Hollows all attacking and devouring each other, Blood Fang wasted no time and jumped into the blood bath. It lasted for days and the blood and guts were truly a beautiful sight but alas it could not last forever soon Blood Fang could feel a strange sensation as he grappled in a pile with the few remaining hollows, each themselves holding a immense power (relative to a hollow) that they gained from devouring so many of their kin. He began to feel himself drawn into the other beasts, not just in body but in mind and soul. A darkness began to fall over Blood Fang as the psyche of the Hollows fought for dominance in the newly forming Gillian, he could feel himself being pushed down into the mindless depths and he could feel that there was nothing there, even less then nothing and that was something Blood Fang did not want, he had to be, through sheer force of will Blood Fang pushed himself to the “top” if you will as the Menos Grande finishes forming, the new Menos looked like the others but with a red tear drop marking under its left eye.
Gillian: Nothing to remarkable happened to Yuuki as a Gillian, what do you expect he’s a mindless blob! After the transformation into a Gillian Blood Fang could only feel the hunger, he needed to feed. The Blood Fang Gillian could feel in its body, it could feel the other Gillians beneath its new feet, under the white sands of Hueco Mundo. The Gillian dug with what would become a trademark frenzy later in its lifetime and burrowed down into the Forest of Menos. The Gillian could see the others and saw them only as his meal. The devouring began, and devour he did, the Gillian ate and ate and ate and ate, any person of scientific standing would be baffled at how even a creature as large as a Gillian could seemingly eat 20 other Gillians as big as he and not simply burst. Well the Hollows are different for everyday animal and the emptiness inside never left the Gillian, not even for a moment. After what must have been years and thousands of Gillians later the Gillian felt strange, it had stopped eating for the first time in years and simply stood their swaying from side to side as it felt a new power take hold of its body. The Gillian crackled with energy and great lights emerged from inside it as the evolution smashed and cracked the body of the Gillian down to a much smaller size, the Gillian was now an Adjuchas and he was Blood Fang once again.
Adjuchas: Blood Fang quickly shredded his way back up through the white desert, he could feel the surface calling to him and besides he wanted to be rid of those blasted moaning Menos. Blood Fang slithered up onto the surface and examined his new body. He as much a snake as snakes come. He had lost the arms of his Hollow form but without them his snake body was able to gain tremendous speeds by slithering through the sands of the desert, he would burrow into the sand and spring up, constricting an crushing Hollows and other Adjuchas and devouring them to appease his hunger. Yes the blasted hunger, didn’t it ever go away! He had been eating for what seemed like an eternity and never grew full, if he wasn’t already quite mad this certainly would drive anyone insane. But Blood Fang continued to eat because with every Hollow he devoured he could feel his power grow, and because when he didn’t eat he could feel his power begin to wax. And know he had a real working mind (albeit crazy) and nothing terrified him more than going back to that mindless Gillian state. This time the process took much longer and many more Hollows then before but eventually Blood Fang could feel his power hit a cap and he no longer got stronger from eating hollows, even other Adjuchas, this made him angry but I didn’t stop him from killing of course. Then something news worthy happened in Hueco Mundo their self proclaimed king Baraggan Luisenbarn had stepped down, to a Shinigami! This greatly confused Blood Fang, although he had been in Hueco Mundo for at least a century he remembered a time in the world of the living when he had been beaten back to Hueco Mundo by a man calling himself a Shinigami, that wouldn’t do at all he didn’t know what had gotten into Luisenbarn but he was going to his palace, Las Noches, and he was going to kill that Shinigami. He got there and snuck in to the palace unseen (or so he believed) and found the false king sitting on his throne, he stayed in the shadows before launching a full power Cero at the shinigami, it seemed to be a direct hit. Ha! Let that be a lesson to Shinigami who think they can come into the world of Hollows. “That wasn’t a half-bad Cero.” What!?! Blood Fang looked back and saw the man sitting is his slightly singed throne completely untouched, impossible it had to be a trick he had put his full strength into the blast the man should be ash. Wait where did he go, the man was gone from his seat, when did he move? A voice rang out from behind Blood Fang “You must have been unaware I am the new king of Hueco Mundo, my name is Sosuke Aizen.” When did he move? And how did he get behind me? The bastard! As if sensing Blood Fang was ready to attack again the man called Aizen spoke again “If you join me I can give you power you’ve never dreamt of.” That stopped Blood Fang in his tracks, power, what power? The only thing left was to become a Vasto Lorde but Blood Fang’s power had reached its limit he could never become a Vasto Lorde, was this man claiming he could make him one? “I will turn you into an Arrancar, and you will be at least twice as strong as you ever were. Now will you join me or will I have to have Gin here remove from my presence” What!? Blood Fang turned and saw another man with silver hair, looking at him with a sick grin on his face, when did he get there? He must have been there already and Blood Fang just didn’t notice him. Blood Fang had never been cornered like this before, but he knew that power had always been what he wanted “I will join you.” The Adjuchas said “Not good enough” the man replied “You just tried to kill me do you think I’ll trust you just like that? No, lower your head and swear your allegiance to me.” Anger boiled up inside Blood Fang, the nerve of him! He should just, the man lowered his gaze to the Adjuchas and he felt fear, greater than any fear he had felt before, fear at the unfathomable power this Shinigami possessed, why was he so strong? Blood Fang was confused and afraid he felt as though he was being stared down by a god…Blood Fang lowered his head at the man’s feet “I swear my allegiance to you, Aizen-sama.” Aizen merely smiled and waved his hand, at this a small pillar rose up from the floor before opening up to reveal a small crystalline object, this too radiated a power that seemed to be trying to stifle Blood Fang’s very existence, Blood Fang recoiled from it slightly and Aizen only smiled, he held the sphere towards blood fang and a bright light enveloped the room. Blood Fang felt his body be warped and twisted for what felt like an eternity, but there was no pain, when the light subsided Blood Fang laid curled in the fetal position on the ground before uncurling and standing unsteadily on his new feet “What is your name Arrancar?” Aizen-sama said. His name? “Blo…no my name is Yuuki Terumi, Aizen-sama.” Yuuki Terumi had spoken for the first time on over a century, Aizen smiled sinisterly again “Well Yuuki Terumi, welcome to my Arrancar army you are Arrancar 19.” Aizen walked from the room leaving Yuuki to bask in his new found powers as he left the man that Aizen referred to as Gin spoke up “Well come on now will get your number tattoo and get you some clothes too, where do you want your tattoo?” “I don’t know what that is.” Gin shakes his head and sighs “It’s a mark you put on your body somewhere to tells what your Arrancar number is, you get to pick where you want it.” Yuuki considers this for a moment and holds up the palm of his right hand “Here, I want it here.””Good, now get going.” Gin motions for Yuuki to go out of the throne room”One of the other Arrancar will show the way.” Yuuki still looks a little confused but he walks out of them room anyway, an arrancar attendent immediatley walks up and leads him off down one of the hallways of Las Noches. Yuuki had begun to smile as he felt his new power coursing through him, he had been reborn, he was an Arrancar.
Arrancar: Yuuki’s life as an Arrancar is only just beginning but there has already been many interesting things happened to him. For one Aizen died. Yuuki was furious that Aizen didn’t take him off to battle with him, only his precious Espada and those to Shinigami; Gin and Tosen. He hated every last one of them, especially the Espada, acting so high and mighty, he would show them one day, damn right he would. They treated him like dirt, just because Yuuki treated the people below him like dirt didn’t mean the people who though they were above him could do the same. Then it happened. The only one to return from the battle was Ichimaru, he said Aizen and Tosen were dead and so were all the Espada Aizen took with him. But Gin had lived and he had that blasted Hogyoku with him. Why couldn’t that have been destroyed too? It made Yuuki uneasy. Gin began to rebuild where Aizen had left off he made 10 new Espada which Yuuki infuriatingly enough still wasn’t apart of and was their new “leader”. Yuuki followed Gin for now but he was determined to see him dead one day, he hated the man since he had first seen him and just couldn’t say why, and he show up those damn Espada too.
-------------------- Skills-------------------- Skills
- Swordsmanship- Intermediate
- Cero - Advanced
- Sonído - Advanced
- Hand to Hand - Intermediate
Attributes
- Speed - Advanced
- Power - Intermediate
- Stamina - Advanced
- Intelligence - Intermediate
-------------------- Powers-------------------- Natural Powers
- Cero: An ability that is gained when a Hollow first turns into a Gillian it allows them to fire a powerful blast of spirit energy in the form of a laser
- Garganta: : The Garganta is an ability that all Hollows posses, it allows Yuuki to open a dimensional rift and travel in between Hueco Mundo, The Soul Society, and the World of the Living
- Hierro: The Hierro as an ability posses by Arrancar used to harden their skin against attacks, some have harden it to a ridiculous degree. Yuuki’s Hierro is of a average level, it might soften attacks of a higher level the tiniest bit, while doing significantly more to protect against weaker attacks
- Pesquisa: Suprisingly Yuuki has an above average skill with Prequisa, he practiced with it because he was told it would help him find the strongest people
Yuuki’s Cero is a brilliant bright green color, nearly identical to his hair. He fires his Cero by cocking his right arm back at the elbow and the Cero will appear in the palm of his hand. He will then push his arm out to its maximum length and yell “Cero!” and the Cero will fire
Arrancar Abilities 炎の葉 Blade of Flame
- Description of Attack -Yuuki will use his zanpakto’s natural affinity for fire and coat the entire weapon in flames, his is immune to the flames heat, it heats the metal very hot and prolonged contact could give you 3rd degree burns
- Type -Offensive
- Range -10 feet (Length of chain+sickle on the end)
- Limitation -: Yuuki has to be touching some part of the weapon to coat it in fire, the fire could be put out with a strong enough water or wind attack, finally it takes a moment for the fire to engulf the length of the weapon, EX. If I had thrown the weighted and wrapped it around someone’s leg it would take about 3 seconds for the flames to reach them
熱せられた手 Heated Hand
- Description of Attack -Yuuki has the power of fire as his element and such can heat any part of his body to extremely high temperatures, enough spirit energy would cause whatever body part to burst into flames
- Type -Offensive (Could be defensive against Ice or something)
- Range -As long his arms and legs+1 foot at maximum heat
- Limitation -It is a constant drain ability and thus using it for any extended period of time would tire him out, a heat strong enough for third degree burns would take about 1% of his reiatsu per second full flame on mode would be 3% per second
輝くゼロ Flaming Cero
- Description of Attack -A unconcentrated cero blast. Yuuki gathers a cero in his palm as he normally does but the infuses it with fire causing the energy ball to ignite. He launches it by yelling “Kaenhoushaki!” (Japanese for flamethrower) it then comes out as a large stream of fire can be continuously fired.
- Type -Offensive
- Range -100 feet
- Limitation - The techniques takes a large amount of sprit energy to control and is a significant drain if used over a period of time, if used for 10 seconds it would drain 20% of his reiatsu
[/blockquote] -------------------- Zanpakutō-------------------- Name: Karasuhebi Translation - Black Snake Call Out Phrase: Moeagaru Karasuhebi Translation - Burst into flames,Black Snake
Appearance
In its unreleased state Yuuki’s zanpakto appears to be a Kusari-gama. It is a foot long sickle attached to a heavy weight by 10 feet of chain. The chain and weight appear to be made from a brilliant black metal while the blade of the sickle is a shiny silver color; the sickle has a simple wrap on the handle. The sickle, chain, and weight are all part of his zanpakto, one could not cut the chain or slices pieces off without normally being strong enough to cut through his blade.
-------------------- Resurrección -------------------- Appearance Yuuki’s Resurreccion is brought about when he takes hold of his zanpakto and begins to spin the bladed end at high speed over his head. He shouts “Moeagaru Karasuhebi!” (Burst into flames, Black Snake) and a pillar of fire erupts under him, when the flames die down his new form is revealed. His Hollow mask has expanded to the shape of the top half of a snake’s skull, including the fangs, it sits atop his head. The red tear drop under his right eye glows and engulfs his body leaving his skin a bright red color. His legs fuse together leaving him once again with a snake tail instead of legs, but his experience with it leaves him much faster. His zanpakto is gone at this point, his has sharp talons to claw with.
Abilities 地獄ブラックヘビ Inferuno Karasuhebi (Inferno Black Snake)
- Description of Attack -Raising his hand Yuuki can expel a large snake made of fire and chains from his hand. He can control the snake and it can breathe fire from its mouth. They are the size of a large constrictor. They fire is hot enough to melt normal metal and Yuuki can control two at once, one from each hand
- Type -Offensive
- Range -50 feet
- Limitation - The snakes can still be put out with a strong enough water or wind attack and a sufficiently strong attack can cut the chains that give them their shape. They drain at 3% reiatsu every 2 seconds
大きい地獄ブラックヘビ Kyousei Inferuno Karasuhebi (Great Inferno Black Snake)
- Description of Attack -The attack is set by Yuuki gathering his spirit energy for a short amount of time (1 post) he then launches chains from both hands and attempts to tie up his opponent in them, once they are confined he will inhale and the breath out a large amount of fire which will travel down the chains in the form of a large snake . The snake can move slightly up, down, left, right, but its direction is mainly chosen by the direction Yuuki was facing at the time of launch.. A enemy his own level would be covered in third degree burns and be unable continue fighting because of the pain, unless they possessed an immense will power. Some of 1 tier or higher would receive mild burns but you know, it would still hurt. Anyone of a lower would be reduced to ash.
- Type -Offensive
- Range -75 feet
- Limitation - It takes a large portion of Yuuki’spirit energy to perform this techniques about 70%, also he has to constrict them first with the chains because the move wont connect otherwise, unless they were standing on the chains or touching them or something stupid
OOC Information
-------------------- Sample Post--------------------
There was no wind underneath the dome of Las Noches, but the clouds of the false sky moved anyway. Yuuki Terumi was sitting on one of the walls of Las Noches staring up at the bright blue sky, his legs dangled over the wall and he seemed completley unaware that if he slipped he would take quite a big drop. He just stared seemingly mindlessly at the sky. Another Arrancar ran out onto the wall, he was a hugh muscle bound brute, one of many. He saw Yuuki sitting on the wall and ran up to him “Yuuki.” Yuuki continued to stare at the sky not making the slightest move to register that he had heard the other Arrancar. “Yuuki.” The arrancar spoke again but Yuuki continued to sit there not moving in the slightest “HEY, TERUMI!” Yuuki finally snapped out of his strance, immediatley beginning to twitch “What in the world do you want?” The large Arrancar stared down at Yuuki distastefully. “Some Shinigami have been spotted on the White Sands, we’ve been ordered to take them out.” Yuuki cocked his head and stared at the Arrancar, as if trying to process what he said, suddenly a large grin broke out on Yuuki’s face as a shudder ran through his body “We get to kill them?” The large Arrancar looks at Yuuki irritated “Yeah Terumi, that’s what I said, you coming or what?” Yuuki spun around and hops down onto the walkway, his fingers are twitching wildly in the air “I sensed their presence a few minutes ago, but was wondering wether or not to go by myself, I want to kill them but then I would find out the Ichimaru wanted them alive or wanted them for a tea party or something stupid like that, and I’d get punished again” The large arrancar is starting to get impatient with Yuuki “Yeah maybe because no matter what your ordered you end up killing somebody, that’s why your sitting on your ass all day, because we can’t ask you to do something that doesn’t involve killing someone, if we do you’ll muck it up.” Yuuki stares at the large Arrancar his right eye twitching slightly “Well then I suppose this is my lucky day, now let’s go, unless your not done talking of course?” Yuuki stares at the large Arrancar questioningly “Listen Terumi just because-“ Yuuki stomps his foot and flings his arms into the air “AAAAH! YOU NEVER SHUT UP! I’M BORED WITH YOU!” Yuuki suddenly dissapears, using his Sonido to begin his chase for the soul reapers “Dammit that freak is fast, better hurry or he’ll manage to mess something up.” The large arrancar jogs along the walkway and back inside Las Noches where he’ll presumably leave to track down Yuuki.
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Post by Wicked on Dec 2, 2010 19:02:18 GMT -5
Just scrolling over this, I have so many problems.
First and foremost, it's still a WIP.
Secondly, this has to be in the FIRST post, not as a reply.
Third, divide everything into paragraphs.
Fourth, don't NPC canons in any part of your app, arrancar or not. Saying he joined Aizen is one thing but NPCing them is bullcrap.
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Post by yuukiterumi on Dec 2, 2010 19:30:53 GMT -5
1. I don't see an option to change the title 2. Just delete all the posts in front of it then 3. That a amazingly broad statement, there are many paragraphs, which need to (arbitrarily) be divided more? 4. Does it matter? I'm not applying for Gin or Aizen. And yeah totally bull crap I had Gin wearing a pretty pink dress and I had Aizen back flipping around the room shouting "I love ponies"
Finally where are these rules located? I just read through the character app rules and no where in there does it say I have to change the title or have the finished app as the first post, or break everything into paragraphs, what does that even mean? Should the whole thing have been like this? I doubt it.
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Post by Wicked on Dec 2, 2010 19:48:55 GMT -5
That's because the first post's gone and you were too busy going, "Lawl, I'm not gunna use the template." It's called the edit button. The same reason we don't allow double posting.
Well, it's gone now.
Well when you have a two page wall of text with no spacing between different speakers at the least, then yes, it has to be divided.
No canon involvement in applications unless you're applying for a canon character.
Want me to sum it up in three words?
Now, if our eyes are burning because you're too lazy to separate your history, and we've asked you to make it easier to swallow by not posting a massive wall of text, and it's all just one big run on, then we're not asking. We're telling.
There is a rule that unfinished apps must be placed in WIPs. It would be common sense to remove the wip when the application is complete.
Fair enough though, if you don't want to respect me, I don't want to respect you either.
Denied due to the following reasons:
Being a perpetual WIP NPCing canons in your history Disrespecting the reviewing staff Having a one-paragraph RP sample (since spacing it out is so hard) Audacity
Have a nice day.
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