Post by Shinigami Kyra on Jan 3, 2010 3:34:27 GMT -5
Edit: I was unaware that Raven was posting a reply at the same time as myself; as such, I may repeat what my fellow staff has stated above.
Rippuku Za Yajuu
Ok, this doesn't make all that much sense whatsoever. So, it's still activated by any source of liquid... but it can't come from Mahae, unless it's his blood? I still don't understand this; so he can't use his own sweat, urine, or anything else of his 'own' fluids, aside from his blood? But he could use the sweat, urine, fluids and so forth? I don't really understand the difference.
I don't really see any change to this portion in accordance to what I asked aside from the 'but it is unlikely.'
And obviously, you didn't seem to read my review of the ability. What Raven said was true; I wanted you to rewrite it completely, not edit it. Not only did you miss things, like stating in one spot it lasts ten punches, and in another, it lasts thirty, but you're character is still ridiculously strong, while at the same time, adding a super strength shikai ability that seems to activate whenever liquid hits it. Overall, as of right now, I'm denying the ability.
It has been stated that we would like you to re-write it, and not only have you accused my fellow staff member of "obviously" not doing her job, which is to read over what he or she reviews.
You pretty much become a hypocrite by stating my staff has 'obviously not read your edited ability' while overlooking the fact that I suggested you to rewrite it.
Ichigo - Broken character. He's the main character of the show, and as such, it's pretty stupid to compare any original character to the main characters of the show since they pretty much level up faster than ANY other character in any other Shonen Jump series.
Ishida - Reiryoku Absorption; he acquires the mastery of this ability DURING his fight with Mayuri through his Final Form release. Seireitei is made up completely of Reiryoku. Hm... Pretty possible for him to damage a Captain with his most powerful shot.
All Original Characters - Do not reflect Main Characters. They will not level up like Ichigo, or stand toe-to-toe with Captains after mere months of acquiring Shikai, while Captains themselves have mastered their Bankai, more likely than not, long before your Shinigami graduated the Academy.
I already did in my first review; you still seem to have a very high potential abilities that can be considered Godmod. You don't seem to have any consistency with the limitation of how long it lasts. Your character seems to be super strong, super fast, with a super duper strong attack that lasts ten punches that has potential of knocking back people of tiers higher than him.
And getting back to this little sentence; I suggested you to rewrite it, not edit it, because already, you have not only missed several inconsistencies, but now you still have problems with it. As such, I am simply going to have to deny this ability.
Rippuku Za Yajuu - Final Decision = Denied.
Rippuku Za Yajuu
The only liquid that can activate this is from someone else, unless it is Maheas blood.
Ok, this doesn't make all that much sense whatsoever. So, it's still activated by any source of liquid... but it can't come from Mahae, unless it's his blood? I still don't understand this; so he can't use his own sweat, urine, or anything else of his 'own' fluids, aside from his blood? But he could use the sweat, urine, fluids and so forth? I don't really understand the difference.
A person of a higher tier will feel the punch just not as bad as a person of a lower tier. They have a chance of flying back also but it is unlikely.
I don't really see any change to this portion in accordance to what I asked aside from the 'but it is unlikely.'
Obviously you haven't read them because I took out that it has a chance to kill lower tiers
And obviously, you didn't seem to read my review of the ability. What Raven said was true; I wanted you to rewrite it completely, not edit it. Not only did you miss things, like stating in one spot it lasts ten punches, and in another, it lasts thirty, but you're character is still ridiculously strong, while at the same time, adding a super strength shikai ability that seems to activate whenever liquid hits it. Overall, as of right now, I'm denying the ability.
I suggest rewriting it completely, not editing it
It has been stated that we would like you to re-write it, and not only have you accused my fellow staff member of "obviously" not doing her job, which is to read over what he or she reviews.
Also how is it being hypocritical? Is it because it can hurt people of lower tier and still give me a chance against people of higher tier?
You pretty much become a hypocrite by stating my staff has 'obviously not read your edited ability' while overlooking the fact that I suggested you to rewrite it.
As you can see Ichigo isn't is strong as Zaraki but he still did damage. Along with Ishida hurting Mayuri. I'm sure Mayuri is stronger than Ishida but he still got hurt.
Ichigo - Broken character. He's the main character of the show, and as such, it's pretty stupid to compare any original character to the main characters of the show since they pretty much level up faster than ANY other character in any other Shonen Jump series.
Ishida - Reiryoku Absorption; he acquires the mastery of this ability DURING his fight with Mayuri through his Final Form release. Seireitei is made up completely of Reiryoku. Hm... Pretty possible for him to damage a Captain with his most powerful shot.
All Original Characters - Do not reflect Main Characters. They will not level up like Ichigo, or stand toe-to-toe with Captains after mere months of acquiring Shikai, while Captains themselves have mastered their Bankai, more likely than not, long before your Shinigami graduated the Academy.
So tell me again whats wrong with my abilities and be specific not rewrite or replace
I already did in my first review; you still seem to have a very high potential abilities that can be considered Godmod. You don't seem to have any consistency with the limitation of how long it lasts. Your character seems to be super strong, super fast, with a super duper strong attack that lasts ten punches that has potential of knocking back people of tiers higher than him.
So tell me again whats wrong with my abilities and be specific not rewrite or replace.
And getting back to this little sentence; I suggested you to rewrite it, not edit it, because already, you have not only missed several inconsistencies, but now you still have problems with it. As such, I am simply going to have to deny this ability.
Rippuku Za Yajuu - Final Decision = Denied.