Shinigami on the side of the Quincy

[taki]

Name: Gosai Sherutoku
Age: 192
Gender: Male
Personality:

Due to his hatred of his own race, the shinigami, for their crimes he will quickly become angry towards any shinigami that talks to him and will likely attack. He is quiet and stern most of the time and will rarely smile and instead shows a look of anger or no emotion at all. He is very intelligent and can work out strategies for combat almost instantly and is very good at analysing for weaknesses and strengths of his opponents. Although the quincy do not trust him as much as they could due to his race he would rather fight with them then the shinigami after the massacre they commited.

In combat he fights either with his fists or his two zanpakutohs. He is skilled at kenjutsu and battojutsu making him a formidable swordsman. He fights strongest with his right hand in which he will wield his own zanpkakutoh rather then the trophy zanpakutoh. He will always smoke a cigar after battle.

Appearance:

After leaving the shinigami he forefitted his robes and instead wears a denim jacket, black shirt, dark blue jeans and a leather belt. He also wears a pair of black harley davidson sunglasses. At his waist on his left is his zanpakutoh sheathed in a sheath of green leather. He also carries with him a momento of his fight to freedom from the shinigami, a second zanpakutoh. He is unable to activate it, but he can use it in its sealed form allowing dual swordsmanship. This is a tanto sized blade that he keeps sheathed underneath his arm.

He is 5ft11 and has scruffy blonde hair, dark stubble and has an athletic build. He has dark green eyes and a scar on his cheek. He is often, though not always, seen wearing fingerless leather gloves, which cover his scarred hands. He is almost always seen smoking a cigerette, except after a victory where he will smoke a cigar.

Zanpakuto Spirit:

His zanpakutoh is a beautiful athletic blonde haired woman with green eyes. She wears a silver knights helmet with a golden visor with wings upon it. She has large silver shoulder plates with gold trim with matching gauntlets and boots. Other then that she is barely clothing except for a small amount of silver armor with gold trim that barely covers her ample breasts. She wears a black pair of underwear with a skirt of silver armor with gold trim. On her back is dark blue cape.

She wields a weapon identical to Gosai's shikai. A spear with a brown shaft and two blades. These blades are gold and large with a curved wing on them. Attached to the base of one of these blades is a chain the other part is attached to a large golden shield in the shape of a wing with several spikes on it. The edge of it is sharpened. The above picture is of her.

The world of this spirit is an ancient battleground covered in broken armor, weapons and skeletal figures.

Sealed Zanpakuto:

His sealed zanpakutoh is your average katana with a crossguard shaped like the maltese cross and is black with gold trim. The blade itself is pale blue in colour.

Shikai Description:

Name: Tenshinaito
Release command: Defend the skies as the angels cry, Tenshinaito .
Description: A spear with a brown shaft and two blades. These blades are gold and large with a curved wing on them. Attached to the base of one of these blades is a chain the other part is attached to a large golden shield in the shape of a wing with several spikes on it. The edge of it is sharpened.
Status: All abilities mastered.

Shikai Abilities:

Reiatsu teikou(Reatsu resistance) [MASTERED]: This ability is passive and is active at all times and so his shikai is particularly draining, which is why he does not activate it often. This ability allows him to use his shield to stop or reduce the strength of reiatsu based attacks.

Stronger attacks from stronger opponents will be less reduced and have less chance of being blocked entirely. Weaker attacks from weaker opponents will be more reduced and have a higher chance of being blocked entirely. This includes kidou, quincy attacks and cero based attacks (e.g. bala and cero)

Senkouhi (Flashlight)[MASTERED]: This ability is used to distract opponents and reduce their vision. With this he throws his spear and when it hits the ground or an object it can(if he wants it to) let out a blinding flash of light.

Those of an equal tier to himself will be blinded for roughly 10 seconds. For each tier above this time will be reduced by 2 seconds and for each below it will be increased by 2 seconds.

Hitama(Light ball)[MASTERED]: This does exactly as it sounds. He will aim his spear at an opponent and it will launch a ball of white energy roughly 1ft in radius. This will explode on contact. These can be fired 10 a minute so once every six seconds.

Kinejji(Gold Edge)[MASTERED]: Gold edge enhances the cutting power of his shikai fivefold.

Bankai Description:

Name: Tenshinaito Valkyrie
Release phrase: Bankai Tenshinaito Valkyrie
Description: His weapon retains the form of his shikai, but his clothing changes to shining silver armor with gold trim with a helmet identical to his spirits. When his shikai is activated ten balls of light 3ft in diameter will surround him.
Status: Not yet Mastered

Bankai Abilities:

Shikai augmentation[MASTERED]: A passive ability that allows him to use all of his shikai abilities, but twice the strength.

Hikago(Light cage): With this he can seperate all of the lights into smaller balls of energy that surround him and his opponent and then send out tendrils of light creating a cage of energy for him to fight his opponent in. He can launch a beam of light from seven of these balls every minute, though this is quite draining on his reiatsu (these are equal to his normal shikai Hitama). The base of this cage is 77ft in diameter.

Hisaku(light rope)[MASTERED]: This is a minor version of his Kokudohi in which he surrounds his opponent with four balls of light, which then send out tendrils to tie the opponent up. The stronger the opponent the easier it is to break free of these bonds. The weaker the opponent the harder it is to break out of them.

Gokyuutai Arashi(great orb storm): A heavily draining technique that has taken years to develop even to this low level of mastery. With this he combines all ten of the orbs into one large orb. At first this was all he could do, but then he developed it so that he could launch off every little bit of energy in it into arrows of energy roughly equal in size to the average quincy arrow. He developed this technique in honour of them. It can launch up to 777 arrows though when he uses a smaller amount they launch faster and it is far less draining. If he launches all 777 his bankai deactivates and he collapses so it is a last resort technique.

Skill Level: Kidou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Advanced
Skill Level: Shunpou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Advanced
History/Background:

His life began pretty normally with no major problems. He was born in soul society and raised by your average family. However, he desired to find greater strength and so he applied for the spiritual arts academy. Fortunately, he had above average spiritual power and was accepted. He did not join the top class like famous shinigami such as Renji and Kira, but instead was in the middle class like Rukia. He trained hard and graduated after the six years excelling in zanjutsu and hakuda and being average in all other arts.

He joined 2nd squad to develop his shunpo further and because he felt he felt Soifon was someone worth following and the history of the squad fascinated him. He applied for the squad and managed to pass the application exams. He was put into the patrol corps, which he liked quite a bit as it allowed quite a lot of freedom. It was as a member of the patrol corps that he achieved shikai through extensive training in his free time. This took him about 5 years to achieve and even longer to master. He did not even try to work on bankai until he had fully mastered his shikai, which took him over 10 years.

Bankai was the greatest weapon availiable to a shinigami and in order to become powerful enough to truly aid the gotei 13 Gosai was determined to achieve it. He began his training not with action, but with study. He spent a lot of time in the grand library reading up on people who had achieved bankai and how. It was whilst he was doing this that he came across information that both startled and disgusted him. The quincy massacre. Despite it being to save the spiritual balance and stop the destruction of the universe it was too extreme a measure. He became engrossed in studying this and learnt much about the quincy. He eventually made up his mind on what to do.

He decided to spend time achieving bankai and learning what he could from the shinigami and then...he would leave them.

He had learnt that bankai required physically manifesting the zanpakutoh spirit and then subduing it. Both were difficult tasks. He spent many years training until after 15 years he managed to manifest the spirit of his zanpakutoh. A long battle followed which left both spirit and shinigami exhausted, but eventually Gosai succeeded and thus achieved his bankai.

Everyone noticed a slight change in him as he was training. He was colder then before and more stern. His squad thought that this suited a member of the 2nd squad perfectly and so did not question it. However, they would wish they had.

Once he had achieved bankai and learnt some of his basic abilities he went to leave, but was stopped by 3 of the patrol corps. Due to his high level of skill he managed to wipe out them out and destroyed their zanpakutoh. However, one zanpakutoh survived and he took it as a momento before fleeing to earth.

Once on Earth he knew he would be hunted after as a rouge shinigami. However, he was skilled at hiding and managed to avoid detection and after 10 years was forgotten.

It was then he began his hunt for the quincy. He knew they would not accept him at first and would have to earn their trust, but he would rather fight for them then the shinigami. He would atone for the sins of the past.

He went to the Blue Sun corporation and after much talking and testing he was accepted to their ranks. However, he was not trusted yet and had to continue to prove himself.

RP Sample:

Gosai was walking down the streets in his gigai smoking a cigarette when he spotted a shinigami. His gaze raked over the male shinigami as a glare. The shinigami looked at him for a moment.

[navy]"Can you see me?"[/navy] the shinigami asked. Gosai glared at the shinigami and then swallowed a soul candy and walked out of his gigai assuming his spirit form and immediately lunged swinging a fist at the shinigami. He was too quick for the shinigami and thus the fist hit him in the face and sent him sprawling.

[green]"That answer your question shinigami scum?"[/green] he shouted at the shinigami. The shinigami got up slowly and looked at him confused.

[navy]"But your a shinigami aren't you?"[/navy] he asked confused.

[green]"I was."[/green] he said with a dark smile. [green]"But I saw the dark past of the shinigami and was disgusted."[/green] He cracked his knuckles and drew his zanpakutoh. [green]"Now run or die shinigami.....and if anyone asks say Gosai Sherutoku will kill any shinigami who speaks to him."[/green] He let off a flare of reiatsu that blasted the shinigami back. [green]"Run fast or you will join those I have already sent to hell."[/green]

The shinigami knew he stood no chance and ran. As he did Gosai raised a hand. "Hado 63: Thunder roar cannon." he added launching a huge blast of reiatsu that reduced the shinigami to dust. [green]"You didn't run fast enough."[/green]

He re-entered his gigai and pulled out a cigar and smoked it. [green]"Another one bites the dust"[/green]

[Shinigami Kyra]

I'm going to headbutt this right now.

First and FOREMOST; NO SHINIGAMI-QUINCY HYBRIDS. Shinigami cannot use Quincy techniques, nor the other way around. Each have there own respective techniques and abilities.

Second; reduce the size of the image; it extends the page FAR too much.

[taki]

its not a hybrid. its a shinigami on the side of the quincy....

[Shinigami Kyra]

Thought I saw some Quincy techniques in there...

[taki]

No he just states he created a technique in honour of the Quincy.

Done

[Shinigami Kyra]

Release Phrase: Have you read the rule on release commands longer than three words?

Shikai Abilities: First of all, three's the limit.

Reiatsu teikou - Too powerful of a defensive technique. Not only do you hold the chance of basically blocking ANY attack that surfaces, even ones that are stronger than his own, but this is always active? Doesn't seem to hold any sort of limitation other than 'it's taxing.' Power denied.

Senkouhi - I want to mention that his power tier would reflect his most powerful point. I.e., if he gets Bankai and is awarded, for example, High Level, Weak. Even if he faces off against Mid-Average, while in Shikai, your character would not be High Level, Weak, he would be Mid Average or so. Power thus far is acceptable.

Hitama - So he can rapid-fire off these exploding balls? You give not actual strength to these exploding balls, or any actual limitation to it. Thus far, power denied.

Kinejji - Power denied, straight out. Bankai already does something like this; increasing one's power to a certain degree. Having a Shikai ability that does this for you neglects the ability of Bankai, so power denied.

Bankai Abilities

Shikai augmentation - While some people do keep their Shikai abilities, that would count as Bankai powers. With this, you have Four abilities, which is already over the max abilities of both Shikai and Bankai, and you list three more abilities on top of this. People are allowed three abilities in Shikai, and three in Bankai. You have four and eight. Power denied.

Hikago - You don't give any sort of description on how powerful this cage is and if its even breakable. Does it harm someone, should they touch it? Could he use this ability to trap people in, without trapping himself?

Hisaku - Same ability as above, pretty much, only doing exactly what I asked for above. Still, you don't give enough description on the actuality of breaking through this technique, aside from someone stronger eventually breaking out, and someone weaker having trouble. Could someone, say, two tiers above break out in seconds? Minutes? Hours? Days?

Gokyuutai Arashi - Again, you don't give any sort of detail on the attack damage itself, or the accuracy of all 777 arrows. I'm a bit iffy on the arrows at all, since arrows are more Quincy-like. Despite the fact that you're making this attack in 'honor' of the Quincy, it just seems like you're stepping into their territory of abilities.

History: Five years to achieve Shikai? Ridiculous. On average, it takes about a hundred years for normal Shinigami; Ichigo, obviously, being a great exception to this.

You don't give any reason as to why he would leave, and why anyone would stop him, other than to simply aid in your superficial reasoning for joining the Quincy. The Shinigami haven't 'done' anything to your character. Patrol Corps wouldn't stop you from leaving, unless you give them reason to. Why was he leaving? Was he leaving to train? To head out on a mission? To take a vacation? Why would the patrol corps even bother with something so mundane?

Why would the Blue Sun even trust a Shinigami? They're their natural enemy. In fact, Uryuu's father is HIGHLY against any sort of Shinigami contact, aside from obvious hidden pasts between himself and Isshin. And, even then, their relationship seems to be rocky at best. Taking in some stranger Shinigami seems far too convenient, and in fact, I think they would believe him to be a spy.

You also know that if you create such a rogue character, that he could still be hunted for by the Shinigami.

You don't give any reason as to his betrayal to Soul Society, or his reasoning for suddenly siding with Quincy rather than simply being a rogue all and of his own. What pointed him in the Quincy's direction? What would make him join the enemy?

Far too many inconsistencies.

Sample Post: Not consistent enough for Bankai.

[taki]

Hmmmm I guess i'll just give up on it then. The idea was just a concept I had.

[Shinigami Kyra]

The idea is fine, I just feel you should dig a little deeper into the story behind the character. I can think of several ways on how this could happen; possibilities are endless. It is just from my own perspective of the history that you don't go dig at all into the actual reasoning for this Shinigami feeling hatred toward Soul Society, or why he would even choose the Quincy.

If you truly wish to give up on this character, post a reply stating so, or that you wish to continue with this application.

[taki]

well if i'm perfectly honest although I really like the character idea and everything I can't think of a way to make the history and stuff more indepth.

[Shinigami Kyra]

Application Archived to the player's request.