Post by Rebel Raven on Dec 28, 2009 18:28:47 GMT -5
Alright, it looks like your application is in order. Thank you for being patient and fixing the strange text.
How many can he fire at one time? Can't have him spamming a hundred bala per post.
Sonido is an ability understood to be universal among Arrancar, and needs not be listed unless there's a special quality to the sonido.
Now, the fact your character can use Sonido so freely is a special ability in itself, and thus needs to be limited.
One reason of many is to make sure you're not using Sonido to just dodge everything simply because you're moving so much so fast.
I also have to make sure you know you're not gaining a super sonido that allows you any special speed enhancements, nor are you gaining the ability to attack -during- sonido since it'd not only be high velocity, it'd pretty much be invisible.
What is a "Chokuta,?" Regardless, we need measurements, and some details on it's appearance.
We don't like abilities that can be outright fatal. This needs to be toned down.
Also, the Gran and Cero in the title lead me to believe this is some equivalent to a Gran Rey Cero which is an espada ability only.
As for your character's history, a hollow doesn't really remember their life as a human. An arrancar certainly would not. this holds true for Shinigami, and Vizards as well.
Your character seems awful close to Aizen, and we don't allow close ties to canon characters. Further in this timeline, Aizen was defeated, and killed.
Bala: He is adept at Bala able to fire them in quick succession. His Bala are a dark yellow colour.
How many can he fire at one time? Can't have him spamming a hundred bala per post.
Sondio: One of his greatest prides is his speed. When at full pelt he is said to appear as if he is flying around his enemies like a bird of prey. Due to the sound produced by this technique he is known for filling the battle field with the sound of static.
Sonido is an ability understood to be universal among Arrancar, and needs not be listed unless there's a special quality to the sonido.
Now, the fact your character can use Sonido so freely is a special ability in itself, and thus needs to be limited.
One reason of many is to make sure you're not using Sonido to just dodge everything simply because you're moving so much so fast.
I also have to make sure you know you're not gaining a super sonido that allows you any special speed enhancements, nor are you gaining the ability to attack -during- sonido since it'd not only be high velocity, it'd pretty much be invisible.
What is a "Chokuta,?" Regardless, we need measurements, and some details on it's appearance.
Gran Encendido Cero (Grand Flaming Zero). [Offensive Ability] It is essentially a faster larger version of Encendido Cero. This technique like its basic form is fired from the mouth.
Range: Long (15 meters)
Effects: As an enhanced version of Encendido Cero its main feature is its wider longer range of attack. The flames retain the same effect of its former incarnation but this can be more devastating and even fatal should you be caught at point blank range.
Limitations: The Gran Encendido Cero consumes a huge amount of Reiatsu leaving Malus drained after its use, more so that its former incarnation. It also requires some charging leaving him open for attack.
This attack also has another major drawback, should Malus hit an enemy at point blank range he runs the risk of injuring himself with the attack. The Cero flames have only 50% the effect on Malus that they do on others but at this scale it can still be devastating.
Range: Long (15 meters)
Effects: As an enhanced version of Encendido Cero its main feature is its wider longer range of attack. The flames retain the same effect of its former incarnation but this can be more devastating and even fatal should you be caught at point blank range.
Limitations: The Gran Encendido Cero consumes a huge amount of Reiatsu leaving Malus drained after its use, more so that its former incarnation. It also requires some charging leaving him open for attack.
This attack also has another major drawback, should Malus hit an enemy at point blank range he runs the risk of injuring himself with the attack. The Cero flames have only 50% the effect on Malus that they do on others but at this scale it can still be devastating.
We don't like abilities that can be outright fatal. This needs to be toned down.
Also, the Gran and Cero in the title lead me to believe this is some equivalent to a Gran Rey Cero which is an espada ability only.
As for your character's history, a hollow doesn't really remember their life as a human. An arrancar certainly would not. this holds true for Shinigami, and Vizards as well.
Your character seems awful close to Aizen, and we don't allow close ties to canon characters. Further in this timeline, Aizen was defeated, and killed.
