bando3
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Post by bando3 on Aug 30, 2010 3:34:41 GMT -5
Is this ok
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Post by Shinigami Kyra on Sept 2, 2010 11:07:46 GMT -5
Lots and lots of grammatical errors make it difficult to read. Run on sentences too.
One example; Hmm I wonder why Kitsune held back with that punch maybe were getting along better. I think you mean "we're" not "were." There's several things like this (this is also a run-on sentence) throughout your application that pretty much makes it very difficult to understand. I suggest copying the application and pasting it into Word. While Microsoft Word doesn't catch all grammar problems, it would fix the most common and 'makes my eyes bleed' mistakes.
Horeru Tsuki-Howling Moon - You did nothing but add a single sentence to the end of it, which doesn't help at all. Take a look at the sample application for a Vizard and read the Tier description for abilities.
New Sample post please.
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bando3
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Post by bando3 on Sept 5, 2010 16:27:43 GMT -5
I put it into word and paste it back and changed the sample post.
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Post by Shinigami Kyra on Sept 24, 2010 8:21:14 GMT -5
Approved, Mid-Level, Weak
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Post by Rebel Raven on Nov 13, 2010 17:42:50 GMT -5
fixed appearing age typo as per request.
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