Mercurious
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In yo' base, killin yo' manz.
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Post by Mercurious on May 15, 2012 17:25:28 GMT -5
*Facepalm* My bad.
Updated.
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Post by Wicked on May 16, 2012 5:15:09 GMT -5
How would they put out the fire once they caught on fire?
Add more description to the original ability and be wary of the mention of "his ability to bend light" since it's not there anymore.
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Mercurious
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Post by Mercurious on May 16, 2012 17:56:14 GMT -5
Done. Removed the mention to his previous ability. Also I stated how the attack is initiated, what it looks like, and places the flame part in the description--as well as how to treat such an occasion.
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Post by Wicked on May 16, 2012 18:18:39 GMT -5
You put the description on the wrong power.
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Post by Mercurious on May 16, 2012 18:35:32 GMT -5
....*Facedesk*
Fixed.
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Post by Wicked on May 17, 2012 4:51:33 GMT -5
Cool. Now just write an RP sample that isn't a fight scene.
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Mercurious
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Post by Mercurious on May 17, 2012 8:26:13 GMT -5
Done!
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Post by Wicked on May 17, 2012 17:14:40 GMT -5
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