Logan hatachi

[logan]

Name: Logan hatachi
Age: 200
Gender: Male
Personality:

Logan does not like to fight and thinks that doing so is evil but he will not be afraid to protect those he cares about, wich also means he will take the fight to the enemy if need be to protect the soul sosiety.

Appearance:

he is 6-6 feet tall with a 180 pound build (most of that being musle) he wares his bloond hair down in a mowhaw (but not spiked down) his eye color is green

Zanpakuto Spirit:

dno is a spirit who wants to see the world burn and dissagres with Logans views on battle and openly dissagres with him if it was up to dno he would have Logan take on the whole soul sosiety but must be satisfyed by hallows and other threats to the soul sosiety.

Sealed Zanpakuto:

when in sealed form dno is 2 12 inch zanpakutos with longer then normal hilts.

Shikai Description:

in order to relese dno Logan must call out his name and push the 2 ends of the hilt together in order to fuse them to become a 2 bladed sword as a resalt the blades become sharper and Logan becomes stronger due to dnos blood thirsty will

Shikai Abilities:

N/A

Bankai Description:

N/A

Bankai Abilities:

N/A

Skill Level: Kidou: Beginner
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Advanced
Skill Level: Shunpou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Advanced
History/Background:

when Logan was a boy he saw the ture evils of war fair when his parents fell before the oposing force and he saw the pain they had caused others scaring him for life.

RP Sample:

Logan looked over the bodys and carnage,the fight was over in the end nether side had won both sides were masacured tears started to fall from logans eyes.
he felt sorry for himslef and his parents atfrist but then he had realised what then done he looked around him there were other grevers too some on difrent sides but it didint matter anymore in the end they were all the same as Logan thoght about that he said "if only they would have realised that sooner" Logan looked back at discust at his parents realising that it was there falt as well not just the people who had killed them the moment they entered this war they were both evil

[Shinigami Kyra]

Please read the Guides that have been set up for Applications. They can be found on the left side bar. This application does not, by any means, meet the standards that are required of approved applications. As such, since I don't want to repeat myself, I suggest reading over the Guide and then posting a reply only after you have made the proper editing you feel is necessary.

Guides to check:

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Craft of Writing
Applications (General)
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Sample Post
How Not To...

[logan]

hey thx for geting your reply out so quickly i thoght i would have to wait a little longer sorry i thoght i did every thing corectly but i dident realise that you wernt suposed to list any abbilitys untill aproved by the staff.


sorry and thx again for being so fast
Logan

[Shinigami Kyra]

Um... I don't know where in the Guide it says "you wernt suposed to list any abbilitys untill aproved by the staff."

Not only that, but you still haven't done anything to fix your application to meet the standards. Here's a hint; spell check, and lengthen everything. Now, re-read the Guides, because obviously, you haven't read a single one. Here's another hint; read the required limitations.

Personality: Doesn't meet the required length. It's ONE sentence. Wow, such DESCRIPTION in the PERSONALITY! I can totally see how this character would act. Can we say two dimensional?

Appearance: Generic! Awesome! So, is he black, white, tan skinned? Is his hair long, like, reaching down to his ball sack long, or short, like, shaved like his ball sack short? I have no idea, because I don't really see how a Mohawk is worn down. And wares? Is he waring something down, like, his hair? If so, how could it be a mohawk? Doesn't that defeat the purpose?!

Zanpakuto Spirit: Dno? So, your Zanpakuto spirit is a purple long necked dinosaur? I would like to see this guy try to take on Soul Society, or any other mary sue-based Zanpakuto Spirit I've come across.

Sealed Zanpakuto: Dual wielding no less? Well, not with this application. Dual wielding is only given to those that can handle the responsibility of such a rare gift among Shinigami, and thus far, you have proven inadequate of not only reading the rules properly, but obviously, not comprehending the English language all together.

Shikai Description: Ah, so he's like that Sith guy from the first Star Wars movie? Bloodthirsty and all that crap... mary sue some more.

Shikai Abilities: ... you're an idiot. It doesn't say ANYWHERE that you can't list abilities here.

History/Background: ... yea, I have NO idea what the hell this single sentence means at all. Not a clue. Brownie points to anyone who can. Obviously, you haven't read a single part of the Guide or the requirements for acceptable applications.

Overall: Yea, my eyes started bleeding, so I gave up on the sample post. Logan, I think I've seen you on here before, and I've read your applications before, if you're the same person. Quite frankly, I'm tired of repeating myself. Either read the Guides that are there for a REASON, or find some grade school courses to retake in order to understand proper English. Obviously, you have no sense of spelling or grammar, and that is heavily influential on one's approving process. Since you obviously have not fixed anything aside from deleting your abilities, which I still have NO idea where you got that idea from, this application is so far beyond fixable, I'm just going to deny it out right.

Application Denied due to sheer stupidity and lack of reading the Guide.

Thank you, come again.