Re: (WIP) My application. (Vizard)

[saintsxtoxic]

Vizard Application

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In Character

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General Information
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Name: ADAMU KIP
Actual Age: 140
Appearing Age: 14(Actual age divided by 10)
Gender: Male

AppearanceMy person has Short, spikey, dark crimson hair. Thanks to finding his inner hallow his eye color is the same color as hit hair but when in some situations the dark crimson eyes will turn black with a neon red ring. His skin complection is an average human's skin complection. Even tho he is 140 he looks 14 and stand about 5"5 and wheighs about 160 pounds (mostley mustel but doesent look musculare.) He is skinny but he is verry strong. Altho it does not show that much. He wears a hooded cloak that is dark crimson like his hair and eyes and he wears a necklas that has a cross on it and wears gloves with the fingers ripped off so his fingers are showing. His zanpakuto is postioned on his hip like most of the shinigami.

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Personality My person is someone that is kind not hardworking but hardworking when he needs to be. He can fight but only when he has to but when he does fights he enjoys it. Sometimes he will start a fight but only when some one pisses him off, like if some one sais something about his family, friends, comrads, or any of his leaders. He likes to laugh at funny jokes but he does not laugh when someone is making fun of someone. He is someone you can reliy on and trust but he does trust but he doesnt fully trust someone untill he can get to reley know that person.

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HistoryHe was born in the real world but his parents were killed by a strong hallow when he was born and he was raised by his uncel. After a few years he matured by the age 14 but he didnt know about his power till he was attacked by the same hallow that killed his parents. Since he didnt now about his powers he couldnt do anything till the shiningami made the hallow to go away. The shinigami told him about his power then the shinigami aked him to go and train with them in the soul socity so he could train and become stronger so he trained there till he was 140 and then he thanked them and left the soul socity and found about his inner hallow.

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Skills
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Skills

• Swordsmanship- Advanced
  
• Kidō- Intermediate
  
• Hohō - Advanced
  
• Hand to Hand - Intermediate

Attributes

• Speed - Advanced
  
• Power - Intermediate
  
• Stamina - Advanced
  
• Intelligence - Intermediate

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Zanpakutō
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Name: Same
Translation - Shark

Unreleased AppearanceThe unreleased form of my Zanpakuto is a regular katana but with a dark blue cloth on the hilt. And the katana is steel has a blue tint to the steel

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Zanpakutō Spirit
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Name: Same
Gender: Male

Spirit Appearance: In the spirit of my zanpakuto he is a great white shark but is black on the top half of him and grey on the bottom. His eyes are black with a neon red circle.

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PersonalityMy spirit is someone that is kind not hardworking but hardworking when he needs to be. He can fight but only when he has to but when he does fights he enjoys it. Sometimes he will start a fight but only when some one pisses him off.

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Relationship to MasterHe is verry trustworthy to me and I trust him completley. We dont fight as 2 we fight as 1 so when we fight we do the samething. Also, we compermise and deside things togeter and we know every thing about eachother.

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Inner WorldIt is a vast ocean with rocks, sand. This ocean represents my inner core cause since we are 1. How ever i am is like the inner world when im mad and depprese the inner world is like a bad thunder storm. But when i am calm cool and collected the inner world is calm and peacfull. BUT and when i me BUT when i am pissed the inner world becomes active and that is when i my zanpakuto spirit is relesed and comes alive and shows next to me.

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Inner Hollow
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Name: kappa
Gender: Male

AppearanceSame as the spirit but one differnece the shark is red on top and black on the bottom.

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PersonalityHe loves to draw blood from his opponets and is not as trust worthy as my zanpakuto spirit and other than that he is like the zanpakuto spirit.

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Relationship to Master Same as Spirit

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Hollow Abilities
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Mask Appearance and Summoning When i summon my hollow mask i can only use it when i have my shikai out because the the mask is red and black and the mouth is open abd its painted black and the rest of the mask is red with black claw marks on it and the teeth on the mask are shaped like sharks teeth.

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Hollow Abilities

Name of AbilityCero

• Description of Attack - This cero is different than regular cero because the regular cero is a blast and explodes the target but this cero hits the target but doset make them explode it makes what ever it hit implode ( get sucked in). Heres an exampel say i was fighting some one and i use my hollow and used cero and it hit there hand, the hand would be gone in a matter of minutes but the wouldnt feel any thing but it would be like it had been blown off ( blood and every thing would be comeing out.) ant that is the difference between my cero and others cero.
  
  
  
• Limitation - One big blast or 3-5 little beams
  

Name of AbilitySpeed

• Description of Attack - Allows me to move faster than normal
  
• Limitation - As long as i can stay in my hollow mask
  

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Zanpakutō Shikai
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Call Out Phrase: Feed Same
Translation - Feed Shark

Shikai AppearanceWhen i call out same my blue tinted katana gets curved steel as sharp as a great white sharks teeth on both sides of my katana.

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Shikai Abilities

Name of AbilityFeed

• Description of Attack - When the target gets cut or stabbed by this shikai the target dosent just hurt the target it also takes some of targets spitit enrgy and if it can absorb enoug the opponet will become tired more quickley.
  
• Type - Power
  
• Range - As far as i can reach
  
• Limitation - Deppends how much spirit energy i have and that is how much my shikai can hold of their spitit energy
  

Name of Ability Bite

• Description of Attack - I can call this out when i sab some one when the blade is in i can call out bite and just an immence pain will be through out the body.
  
• Type - Power
  
• Range - Only when i stab them
  
• Limitation - Twice
  

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• Description of Attack -
  
• Type -
  
• Range -
  
• Limitation -

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Zanpakutō Bankai
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Name:
Translation - If Applicable

Bankai Appearance

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Bankai Abilities

Name of Ability

• Description of Attack -
  
• Type -
  
• Range -
  
• Limitation -

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OOC Information

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Sample Post
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Rules and Guide Agreement
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• Have you read the full rules of this site, including Xat rules, and understand them? Y
  
• Have you read through the Vizard Application Guide? Y
  
• How many Characters do you currently posses? 1
  Canon - #N
  Original - #

Y

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[Shinigami Kyra]

I know this is a WIP, but I must put in a few words.

First off, you sort of messed up the template.

Where it says 'paragraphs,' you delete that part, then place the appearance/personality/history/etc THERE, not right next to the category name. Same for Name of Ability; Delete that, then replace it with the Name of the Ability.

In the Characters Currently Posses, you place the number next to Canon and Original. Delete the #, and place the proper number. If none, put 0 in. Shikai description should not be in first person; nothing should be written in first person, it should be third person, past tense.

I suggest reading or rereading the Template in order to understand what the Limitation means. Twice is not a limitation. There should be a proper description there.

You have not met any of the recommended lengths that's written; i.e., two to four sentences where it says 3-5 paragraphs and so forth. I suggest revamping this application AFTER re-reading the Template Application for Vizards, as well as looking over some of the Sample Applications for a Vizard. They can be found in the Sample Application Section.

[saintsxtoxic]

Fuck this shit im this is soooooooooo hard just to create a character and trufully i dont give a damn about this game. I was just looking for a simpel bleach rpg but no it has be dificult. So fuck this game.

[Rebel Raven]

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