Shinigami - Mamori - MLA

[Mamoru]

Name: Kiba, Mamoru (family name, First name)
Age: 138 (appears to be in his early 20's)
Gender: Male
Personality:

Mamoru is considered to have a "bubbly" sort of personality. Most regard him as a klutz, others as an immature buffoon. Underneath all this though, is an analytical, precise, and strategic mind.

He tends to not want conflict, preferring to compromise than fight. But when push comes to shove he becomes a completely different person. He becomes cold and heartless, fighting only to win.

Mamoru also treasures nature and life above all else. He would gladly step in the way of a horde of hollows just to save a tree, or one of his friends.

Appearance:

Height: 5'7"
Weight: 120
Eye color: Green
Hair Length/Color: Shoulder Length Blond (he typically wears it as a pony tail)


Mamoru is a short skinny man that at normally in mistaken for a girl on first glance. He honors traditional shinigami code of uniform with the exception of shoes (he prefers to go barefoot) and a green haori. He also wears a necklace that has an acorn for a pendant. His long hair is almost never down, the only time it's not held up by a blue band is when he is in his garden enjoying his tea or meditating.

Zanpakuto Spirit:

Kanashii Etai (Sorrowful Nature)

Mamoru's Zanpakuto's inner world world is a vast forest. When Mamoru is communicating with Kanashii Etai he can hear the Zanpakuto's voice from all directions. In the center of the forest, there is a tall, colossus of a tree that appears to have a face on it's trunk. The face is always crying sap. When talking to Mamoru, kanashii appears to be sad and depressed. It has mentioned to Mamoru serveral times that the only way it can be happy is if it finds someone powerful enough to truly use it's full potential and master it's bankai.

Sealed Zanpakuto:

When sealed, Kanashii Etai is a wakizashi with a green hilt and a blue blade about 19 inches long. It's cross guard is diamond shape and is yellow. He wears it in a typical fashion suspended by a decroative yellow cloth.

Shikai Description:

Release: "Hanagata, Kanashii Etai!" (Flourish, Sorrowful Nature!)

Upon release, Mamoru's aura increases and starts becoming a bright green light visible by all around. This like begins to concentrate on Kanashii Etai's blade and then creates a blinding flash. After the release is finished, Kanashii Etai is transformed into a blue handled Jitte with an overall length of about 18 inches. The pronged tine is a gold color and has a feint ringing sound generating from it.

Shikai Abilities:

When in Shikai, Kenashii Etai is no longer a attacking weapon. Instead, Mamoru must use his knowledge and mastery of shunpou and kido to hold of his enemy. As he bides time, Kanashii Etai begins draining and storing reistu from Mamoru. Once full, the ringing emitting from Kanashii Etai ceases, and Mamoru can use the command, "Seimitsu Kyuushu, Kanashii Etai!" (exact revenge, Sorrowful Nature!), to release all the reistu it absorbed through the hilt and creating a 3 foot long, green, energy, sword-like mass from the jitte. At this point, Kanashii Etai becomes primarily an attack based weapon. Mamoru also has the ability to verbally control and manipulate the energy mass, enabling him to use stretch and move it up to 15 ft, any farther, and the energy would detach from the jitte and dissipate. The true weakness of this for of Kanashii Etai is that the energy released is only slightly more powerful than that of the Mamoru's.

Bankai Description:

Mamoru hasn't achieved bankai yet.

Bankai Abilities:

N/A

Skill Level: Kidou: Advanced
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Intermediate
Skill Level: Shunpou: Advanced
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Beginner
History/Background:

As long as he could remember, Mamoru was stuck in the slums of Soul Society. People call it "passing over amnesia", basically, he doesn't remember when he was human, therefore how he died. When he was a kid, he had his own personal garden.
Most people just left him to himself. But one day, a another kid came up and decided it'd be funny to pick on the quiet kid. The bully caught the garden on fire.
Mamoru became furious, using all his anger he punched the bully. As the fist made contact there was an explosion. The bully was flown 30 feet and was knocked out.
What Mamoru just discovered was his uncommon grasp for kido spells. As all this was happening, a shinigami captain was watching. He told Mamoru to apply for the Shinigami Academy. He did. As he progressed through the academy he was noted for his excellence in kido and shunpou.
After graduation, he neglected to sign up for any squad, instead he waits for one to recruit him. He still waits for a squad to approach him.
Fortunately, Soul Society allowed him to have his own personal garden, which is the only place where he can communicate with Kanashii Etai. It was hear where he learned to unlock and control his Shikai.
Most people just left him to himself. But one day, a another kid came up and decided it'd be funny to pick on the quiet kid. The bully caught the garden on fire.
Mamoru became furious, using all his anger he punched the bully. As the fist made contact there was an explosion. The bully was flown 30 feet and was knocked out.
What Mamoru just discovered was his uncommon grasp for kido spells. As all this was happening, a shinigami captain was watching. He told Mamoru to apply for the Shinigami Academy. He did.

RP Sample:

"I wonder what i want to eat today?" Mamoru wondered as he walked down the road.
"I know! I think I'll get an apple!" He screamed with a wide smile. Strangely, he got no looks from this outburst. It appeared as though the people of Soul Society had become used to hearing his exclamations.
As Mamoru arrived at his garden, he sensed a strange aura. As he kept thinking on what it could be he tripped.
"OUCH! What the heck was...." as he looked up to see what he tripped over, he saw a hollow mask looking back.
"EEEKKK" He exclaimed from being startled, but then he collected himself and said, "OK then, time to work"
He pointed at the hollow and with a dark stare said, "Way of destruction no. 4, Pale lightning"
As he walked away from the singed remains of what used to be a hollow he mumbled, "Now what did i come here for anyway..."

[Rebel Raven]

Hello, I'll be reviewing your application.

I'll have to say this up front. Your application is awful small.

Personality barely cuts it.

Appearance needs more details. I don't see any reason he'd be mistaken for a female considering you tell us little more than that.

The Zanpakuto spirit needs a personality for certain, and more details.

Sealed Zanpakuto could use some measurements to help us picture it better.

Shikai appearance needs measurements, and more details. Kudos for picking a weapon form I've yet to see on this board, though.

"When in Shikai, Kenashii Etai is no longer a attacking weapon. Instead, Mamoru must use his knowlege and mastery of shunpou and kido to hold of his enemy. As he bides time, Kanashii Etai begins draining and storing reistu from Mamoru's opponent/s. Once full, Mamoru can use the command, "Seimitsu Kyuushu, Kanashii Etai!" (exact revenge, Sorrowful Nature!), to release all the reistu it absorbed through the hilt and creating an energy, sword-like mass from the jitte. This energy Mamoru can extend and manipulate up to 20 feet."

Power drain is a no go because you do not tell us how he does it, nor any details of the extent of it, nor the effects on someone of a stronger tier than he, on the same tier, and tiers below him.
Furthermore, power drain will not put your character above the assigned tier regardless of how much he can absorb.

Further, you give no details in the manipulation of the energy which, as a sword like mass, would make it an attack zanpakuto.

As for history, not knowing one's human life, and how they died is extremely common. No one is supposed to remmeber their life before the Soul Society.

There's no history of him as a shinigami what so ever. He'd need that at least to know his shikai.

[Mamoru]

Sorry i'm kind new at this, i think it's ok now.

[Rebel Raven]

"to release all the reistu it absorbed through the hilt and creating an energy, sword-like mass from the jitte."
What kind of sword? How long? You need to describe this better.

"Mamoru also has the ability to verbally control and manipulate the energy mass, enabling him to use it as a medium ranged weapon. "
Manipulate to what extent? What are the limits to this?

I also recommend spell checking, and proof reading tomake sure all the words are used properly, and grammar is intact. Refusal to do this can hurt your application, and lower the tier your charcter will be assigned.

[Mamoru]

ok i think it's ready now, i spell checked everything too .

[Rebel Raven]

Approved
Middle Level Average