Vizard - Dakion - MLA

[dakion]

Name: Dakion Kaengu
Age: 205
Gender: Male
Personality:

Dakion is a very complex character. He is a born leader with zero tolerance for ignorance and laziness. He does well with large groups but prefers the company of a small few. He's always open to suggestions to solutions and is logical above emotional. He is very confident but takes care not to be arrogant, and is his own worst critic and pushes himself to his limit on a daily basis. His intelligence makes him quite charming and he has reluctantly admitted a fairly reasonable weakness for pretty women. He enjoys relaxing with his group of friends, playing and writing music, training, and occasionally skirt chasing. During battle he is cold and calculated , always trying to out think the enemy and always relying on his own skills.

Appearance:

Dakion is 6'0 , and about 210 in weight. He appears to be in his mid 20's with a very athletic build due to constant workouts. He has red hair which ends in a ponytail and red eyes with brown skin. He has tattoos on both arms and on his chest. The left arm has tattoos dedicated to his family name, Kaengu. The right arm is dedicated to his zanpakuto. The inscription on his chest is "Success, Power, and Passion."

He wears standard Shinigami attire during the week, with red sash, red earrings, and a red family heirloom with the name Kaengu inscribed on it. On weekends he opts for a more laid back outfit. He will then wear a formal white shirt, black overcoat, and red light shoulder pads. He carries his zanpakuto vertically over his left should in any outfit.

Hollow Mask:

Dakion's hollow mask resembles a red, white, and black wolf. There are black markings that encircle the eyes and black lines that line the sides of the forehead. The insides of the ears, the cheeks, and the snout all have white patches. Red outlines the entire mask and there are white ridges jutting out from the side of it.

Hollow Powers:

Ability: Howling Cero

Effects: A powerful red and black cero blast shout through Dakion's mouth in hollow form. It is as fast and does the same damage as a standard cero attack and about the size of a large wolf and is in the same shape as well. So when he fires it, it flies from his mouth and at the person while making a howling sound. It moves in a linear path. It is a basically a modified cero attack.


Limitations: By it being an energy attack it can be dodged or negated completely if one's spiritual pressure is high enough. It has the same limitations of all ceros as far as accuracy and effectiveness.

Ability: Burikaesu (Come)

Effect: Simply calls his zanpakuto to him in the event he cannot reach it or that he is away from it. As long as he calls it , it will come. This ability allows Ippikiokami to travel great distances at high speeds to reach its master. It comes to him , handle first to rest in his hand. If his hand is blocked it will land, blade first, into the ground near him.

Limitations: He cannot call it if he is already unconscious. He also can't call it if it is trapped, he would have to manually retrieve it. If someone is in the way of Dakion or the swords path the sword must go around the person.

Inner Hollow:

Appearance- His appearance is an all black version of Dakion with red eyes and no irises. Instead of the groomed ponytail Dakion has, his hair is wild and falls loosely of his shoulders. He wears the reverse of Dakion's weekend outfit.

Personality- He's a little bit wilder than Dakion. Since his form is slightly more powerful he would rather crush an opponent into submission instead of out thinking them and defeating them. He also gives Dakion tips on how to get women as if he were some sort of gigolo. Dakion's Inner Hollow gets along with him and is welcome in his Zanpakuto's world whenever he decides to pay a visit.

Zampakuto's name:

Ippikiokami - "Lone Wolf"

Zampakuto Spirit:

With Dakion being such a preferred ladies man since a youth, it is only fitting that his zanpakuto materialized into a female. Ippikiokami spends the majority of her time in the form of a long haired wolf with red paws and a red snout. The tip of her long black bushy tail is red and their is a red moon on her forehead. If she and Dakion talk in the heat of battle this is the form she appears in.

Whenever Dakion enters his zanpakuto realm, she stands upright , shimmers, and is revealed to be an attractive young woman with long red hair , light purple eyes, and very fair skin. She wears a very fitted black outfit which resembles a cloak in the back and a dress in the front, showing off her legs. Physically is roughly 36-24-38 and often flirts with her master whenever he is in a better mood.

She has very close relationship with her master and due to their similarities, she jokingly refers to them as each others "true love." They share the same traits of confidence, sense of duty, high intellect, and charm. She is very protective and supportive of Dakion and in between his ordeals and trysts she plays surrogate girlfriend and offers advice whenever he needs it. She is wary of all who could pose harm to Dakion and is very violent when provoked. She regards her master as her friend, lover, guardian, and other half making her a very reliable ally.

The world of Ippikiokami is an opaque landscape with high rises and three moons in which one is always waning, one is always waxing, and one is always full. There are plenty of cliffs and caverns and there is no dirt, simply sand. Every step taken in this world illuminates under the person and wolf howls can always be heard in the distance. It is said that the howls are the thoughts of Dakion's soul and are always swirling in this domain.

Un-released Zampakuto's Appearance:

Ippikiokami's unreleased state is a red katana within a blood red scabbard. The hilt is bronze with designs carved on its square shape. The handle is woven red silk around a white hand guard with a black tip. The length of blade is 4 ft, wit the tip of blade tinged in black. The scabbard has "Kaengu" carved into it with black writing.

Shikai Release phrase::

"Bare your fangs, Ippikiokami"

Shikai Appearance::

Ippikiokami's released state is quite different than its previous form. The hand guard turns blood red and the hilt is platinum with a small bar to protect Dakion's hand. The blade turns into a small black serrated piece underlaying a long blade with a mean dip on the end of the blade, made strictly for slicing and attacking. The blade lengthens for 4 feet to 4 and a half feet with the black serrated underpiece registering a foot.The blade is also wider than that of the unreleased form. The handle is 8 inches long and the hand guard is 6 inches long. This form is usually held by two hands and with every slice a slight howling sound is heard.

Shikai Abilities::

Ability: Kuikorosu Omoimiru (Devour and Reflect)

Effects: Ippikiokami would be described as a kido type zanpakuto. Dakion aims his sword at the enemy by holding it with both hands and pointing the tip of the blade straight at his target. He then closes one eye and and fires short burst of energy at his opponent. He can only fire 5 bursts before having to reposition himself. The bursts are small blasts, similar to the red flame kido spells. The bursts are as fast as kido spells and can be fired in any order or of any number but they can't exceed five. He can fire 1, then 2, then 2 more before having to fight normally then pull back and reposition this maneuver.

Limitations: It can only be done while standing still and while he is at least 20 ft. away from the person. This attack is similar to firing a 5 shot pistol. Once the fifth energy blast is fired he must return to fighting as normal before he can use it again. This attack also leaves him open for back attacks so to defend he would have to stop and block. Any interference after the first shot requires him to move around and reposition himself before re-initiating it.

Ability: Gento Kisaki Gesshoku (Moon Empress Eclipse) -

Effects- Dakion makes a long slash with Ippikiokami and force a huge surge of energy through the air at a opponent. The energy is shaped in a sickle shape or the form of a wolf fang and is about 2 ft in width and 10 ft in length. It is not as fast as his Howling Cero but is 2/3 as quick. It is his patented "power attack" and is often used when trading energy blasts with an opponent. The impact of the attack also produces a split second flash for a 20 yard radius upon impact. The split second flash does not affect Dakion.

Limitations: It is like all energy attacks and can be dodged if one is powerful or quick enough. And since the slash of energy IS energy it can be sensed and evaded by those in tune with their reiatsu. The split second flash upon impact can be missed by simply closing their eyes upon the attacks impact.


Ability: Abikyoukan Gento Kisaki (Agonizing Cries of the Moon Empress)-

Effects: A large slash is made with Ippikiokami and makes a tangible shield in the air. The shield is circular in shape. The circle is big enough to protect Dakion's entire body as long as he's standing completely still. The shield's measurements would be 7 ft tall and only 3 feet wide. The shield is also black in color.

Limitations: This shield can be broken by a powerful attack and is merely a deterrent and distraction. It can not be used in close range combat, only with at least 20 ft between him and the attack or the opponent. It can only be maintained for up to 10 seconds. It disintegrates after 10 seconds or sooner if Dakion moves from behind it sooner. The shield can also only face one direction. It does not envelop him. It would be similar to him standing behind a wall. He also can't attack while behind the shield.

Bankai Description:

N/A

Bankai Abilities:

N/A

Skill Level: Kidou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Advanced
Skill Level: Shunpou: Advanced
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Intermediate
History/Background:

Dakion was born to humble beginnings in the Southwest side of Rukongai.He has a sister Delphina, a mother, Duleacea, and a father Rankun. The Kaengu family never was a wealthy family but the head of the Kaengu household was always rumored to have above average spiritual pressure, and Rankun was no different. Duleacea and Rankun gave birth to Dakion and Delphina relatively young while Rankun was doing manual labor work to make ends meet in the Rukongai. One night Dakion, now just shy off being a teen, awoke to his father and mother arguing with her pleading that he couldn't leave. Upon seeing Dakion walking in his father smiled, kissed his mother goodbye and took the boy outside for what unfortunately was one last talk. He informed Dakion that he was going to join the Shinigami academy and move his family to a better area of Seiretei and hopefully offer training to Dakion.He and his father had sword fought with practice katanas since he was old enough to stand and everyone in the neighborhood could sense when Rankun was home off of his reiatsu alone. He informed his son to take care of his family until he returned and left him the Kaengu family medallion. On it read "Memento Mori : Stand strong alone and you will always be able to withstand many." This was a reminder to all Kaengu men that death came to all and that defeat was the same as death. With that his father left.

Rankun enlisted in the Shinigami academy and excelled at all tasks due his immense concentration. He was on the verge of graduation and discovering his zanpakuto when a tragedy occurred. A typical training session was going on at the time, with several menos grande emerging and being easily dispatched by the squadrons at work in the area. A fluctuation in the garganta occurred and before anyone knew it, a vasto lorde had crossed into Seiretei. It's emergence into the Soul Realm collapsed the garganta and it immediately started attacking all Shinigami in the area. Rankun was sitting on the deck meditating when he felt the reiatsu that had shaken his very soul. Before him stood a tall horned Hollow, with an outstretched hand charging a massive Cero blast right before he aimed it at his head and let it go. The news spread through the Spirit World. 13 Shinigami murdered by a rogue Vasto Lorde before a captain could report and vanquish it. Among the dead were Rankun Kaengu.

Every year following that,Dakion visited his father's grave with the eternal promise that he will finish his dream and represent the Kaengu bloodline to the fullest. When he was of he enlisted in the Shinigami academy and moved swiftly through the ranks. He was assigned to the Eight Protection Squad and there he met Ippikiokami. He managed to acquire a select group of friends and there he finally felt apart of something. He would go home every chance he got and help around the house and buy things that his mother and needed. He became 3rd Seat in no time was actually happy for one of the first times in his life. When he wasn't training or socializing, he would meditate in Luna Valle, or Moon Valley , which was Ippikiokami's world. As of late she seemed fretful,stating that the howling of his soul sounded harsher and nearer than it ever had. He simply dismissed this as stress he put on himself to be lieutenant. She smirked, replied with her uniform "Yes , Master", and sat down beside him to meditate.

As fate would have it, his future would unfortunately unravel in the same manner that his father's did. The 12th Division was overseeing another training session involving Shinigami and hollow, similar to the incident that occurred with his father. Dakion was participating in the exercise and had just finished killing two low level Hollow when he fell to his knees in pain. He soon found himself being pulled inside of the garganta. He looked in horror as his fellow Shinigami continued training without seeing him slowly being forced to Hueco Mundo. It was as if gravity itself had a hold of him, and on top of that there was this burning feeling deep within his soul that he couldn't control. He cried out for his friend Manahama before the garganta pulled him inside and collapsed. The last image saw was his friends horrified faces as he disappeared.

When he awoke he was in Hueco Mundo under the gaze of a monstrous lizard-like Hollow. He called Ippikiokami but before he could destroy it the face of it contorted in pain and h saw his father. He backed away in fear.....it couldn't be his father. This could not be the proud Rankun Kaengu! His father's face twisted and he mumbled as if it was costing him every ounce of willpower per sound. He soon seemed to gain some control and spoke. "Son......I ....am.... sorrrrryyyyy......," he stammered, " I don't have much time. There is something different about us. I have speculated something was wrong with me for years but nevvvvver this." He went on to explain that his father had participated in Shinigami testing upon entrance to the academy in exchange for rank and wealth. A greedy young scientist by the name of Yunigawa Santorai promised him these things if he would be the guinea pig to give all Shinigami the ability to create garganta, to minimize on the Hollow threat from an inside aspect. Unfortunately this experiment went wrong and his father started becoming more and more hollow like as he got older.

When Rankun was young he remembers his father pushing he and his family out of the house as he transformed fully into a hollow and was killed by Soul Society. His name and record was erased from the record books. His rank, legacy, and wealth was stripped and his family was placed in poverty in Rukongai. Rankun explained how he knew he had to leave for the academy when he awoke one morning in a race and wearing a hollow mask, the same mask which was now his face. His wife broke his mask , revived him , and burst into tears. He decided to leave in the night and to seek help and discipline to control his problem. However, the hollowfication process proved very erratic and he lost control fully. There was no training exercise. No rogue Vasto Lorde. It was him. He was chased through a garganta he created by the Shinigami, where he has remained to this day. He advised him that that is where the family creed came from. Not concerning death but truly dreading the day the hollow inside all Kaengu men overtook them.. He warned his son that this process would only be sped up by being in Hueco Mundo. At that moment Dakion's stomach collapsed on itself and his face started to burn. He tried to focus but he was growing dizzier and dizzier. He began to fade in and out of conscious and felt his face tighten as bone started to grow out of his skin and consume his face. Then he blacked out. There he was introduced to his Hollow self.

He was walking around Luna Valle whistling and smiling. "I've been waiting to meet you all my life....literally." he said with a sneer. Dakion gritted his teeth and flew at the hollow with his hand clenched around his throat. His hollow self cried out as he was rammed through several cliffs and finally managed to free himself from Dakion before sending him flying with a well placed kick. They battled for four hours until Ippikiokami came , in wolf form, and bit down on the Hollows leg and flung him away from her master. Dakion then realized he must gain control of the situation and his subordinates. So he called off Ippikiokami, helped his hollow self to his feet and said that they need to talk. At that moment he awoke with the red and black hollow mask laying beside him, still trapped in Hueco Mundo. At that exact same moment, a garganta opened and his friend Manahama and two more Shinigami came through and found him. Dakion looked around and realized his father was gone, now nothing more than monstrous hollow.

Upon returning to Soul Society he abruptly left in the middle of the night. Not informing his friends or family of his departure. He followed a patrolling soul reaper to Earth where he remains today until he finds his purpose. He still has his family's honor to uphold and he is aware that Soul Society would rather hunt him down and kill him. He was 150 when he first met his hollow. It has been 75 years and he has mastered the transformation and the relationship with his inner self. He learns more everyday and still finds to time to relax. He is somewhat of a vigilante these days, killing all hollow the Shinigami miss and still yearning to bring some prominence to his family's name. He has since then become very powerful and uses his lone wolf mentality to express camaraderie with his fellow vizards and a sense of bittersweet remnance with his shinigami cousins. It is now only him, Ippikiokami, and his destiny.

RP Sample:

She was pretty. Very pretty. In fact she's the prettiest girl he had taken out all week. He knew she was interested by the way her finger circled her lips at the coffee shop. She probably even wanted him to come inside her apartment. A pity he would never see him again.

"Why do you keep looking at the sky?" she asked him with a giggle. "Bird watching, " he said with a smile, "Owl hunting habits. I'm studying it for class." Under the premise of being a intelligent college student, Dakion had been living a normal life. Or what most would call normal.

"Well we're here...." she said biting her lip nervously. "Would you like to come in?" He smiled and leaned in with her to kiss her soft , warm lips....before raising his left hand to knock her unconscious.

"Maybe next year." He said with a sigh. "I know you're there. You've ruined my date as well as my chances for a little midnight romp. Guess I'll have to play with you instead."

Suddenly the Hollow dropped from the tree it had been residing in and slashed at Dakion with his tail. The movement seemed as slow as water dripping from a leaky faucet to the vizard. He dodged the attack and leaped eye into the air before drawing his zanpakuto. "Bare your fangs, Ippikiokami," he said sternly. And drew out the long, wicked blade before sending a slash downward to shatter the hollows mask destroying it.

He then woke the girl up and bid his goodnight. "What happened?" she asked, still in a slight daze. "You might want to lay off the drinks Kimineh," he laughed ," see you tomorrow. Call me."

With that she smiled, blew him a kiss and closed the door. Letting out a sigh of relief, Dakion turned around and walked down the street before vanishing.

[Rebel Raven]

Hello, I'll be reviewing your app.

Dakions eyes turn black with d dots for irises as a hollow.

A typo that leaves people wondering.

Ability: Howling Cero

Effects: A powerful red and black cero blast shout through Dakion's mouth in hollow form. Besides the obvious of it being a powerful attack, the howling aspect renders those nearby, hit or missed by the blast itself, deaf and slightly disoriented for 5-10 seconds. This usually gives him time to sneak up or escape with leaving a sound behind.

Limitations: If a person with higher reiatsu than Dakion braces themselves the side effect is nullified. Also the side effect can be nullified if a person is unconscious, already disoriented, or if they are hit by his blast.

And if they don't brace themselves? It automatically deafens, and/or stuns everyone of equal or lower tier, or someone who isn't braced?

Ability: Burikaesu (Come)

Effect: Simply calls his zanpakuto to him in the event he cannot reach it or that he is away from it. As long as he calls it , it will come.

Limitations: He cannot call it if he is already unconscious.

Does it come back to his hand? Does he have to catch it? Does it come back fast enough to be an attack? Is it able to follow a complex path back to him? Does it wrestle free if it's pinned? If so how strong is it when it tries to break free?

So many questions.

She is the male version of Dakion and they have a very close relationship to the point she refers to themselves as each others "true loves."

She's the male version? Wha? I don't follow.

Ippikiokami's unreleased state is a typical red katana within a blood red scabbard. The hilt is bronze with designs carved on its square shape. The handle is woven red silk around a white handguard with a black tip.

Need measurements, and more details. There is no "typical" katana in any sense of the word.

Ippikiokami's released state is quite different than its previous form. The handguard turns blood red and the hilt is platinum with a small bar to protect Dakion's hand. The blade turns into a small black serrated piece underlaying a long blade with a mean dip on the end of the blade, made strictly for slicing and attacking

Needs measurements.

Ability: Aware Aibo Aikatas (Misery Loves Company)

Effects: Ippikiokami would be described as a kido type zanpakuto. The effect of Aware Aibo Aikatas is instilling despair in the enemy. This ability takes the edge of urgency from the battle which can lead to bad decisions, forfeit, dampening of senses, and/or loss of confidence.

Limitations: This effect can only be used if the person is attacking Dakion. It is a defensive maneuver. The effect lasts as long as the person is aggressive towards Dakion. High enough reiatsus with focus can nullify this attack.

Too powerplay/godmode controlling another player's character like that.

Ability: Gento Kisaki Gesshoku (Moon Empress Eclipse) -

Effects- Dakion makes a long slash with Ippikiokami and force a huge surge of energy through the air at a opponent. The ball of energy is black with a white outline, like a lunar eclipse, and like an eclipse, upon the dispelling of the attack a blinding light large enough to blind the radius of a football field for a few seconds.

Limitations: It is like all energy attacks and can be dodge if one is powerful or quick enough. And since the ball of energy IS energy it can be sensed and evaded by those in tune with their reiatsu.

How huge? Is it like bala fast?

Ability: Abikyoukan Gento Kisaki (Agonizing Cries of the Moon Empress)-

Effects: A large slash is made with Ippikiokami and makes a tangible shield in the air. The shield then uses Dakion's reiatsu to shoot small red kido projectices directly in front of the shield. He instructs Ippikiokami to fire the blades with the phrase "Cry out, Ippikiokami"

Limitations: This shield can be broken by a powerful attack and is merely a deterrent and distraction. The projectiles only shoot directly in front of the shield. They will kill weaker hollow and only injure Shinigami. Once the shield is broken the blades immediately stop. The shield may not disperse blades if Dakion is weak because his reiatsu powers them. Dakion only uses this technique in spurts since a small amount of power is required to operate the shield.

So basically he makes a shield, red projectiles, blades, I assume, appear on the shield, then are fired?

How large is this shield? What's it look like? Can he aim the shield as to help nullify the weakness that it can only fire forward?

About how long does this shield stay up?

Why would the blades stop? Are they senbonzakura like, or are they dart like weapons that only travel forward? Do they fire out in rapid succession? How many at one time? What's the range? How large are these projectiles?
There's a lot of questions that are left unanswered here.

This was a reminder to all Kaengu men that death came to all and that defeat
was the same as death. With that his father left.

odd new paragraph dealie.
Lots of errors like these exist through the history. It makes the history hard to read.

You have a Blockquote HTML code at the front of your RP sample.

Fix these errors and post that you made the corrections when you've made them, and another review will be made.

[Rebel Raven]

Howling Cero is still powergamey/godmodey in that it practically always hits in one way or another thanks to the noise factor, and dictates how a person is going to be in the aftermath with no particular defense against it short of being stronger, never mind the fact a good player won't have their character expect the noise if they simply get out of the way of the main blast.

It comes off as a forced effect designed so you can get in some shots while they're forced into a disabled state.

What IS the radius of the noise anyhow?

Honestly, it's not panning out to be a move anyone would want to deal with, so as it stands, it can't be allowed.

Effect: Simply calls his zanpakuto to him in the event he cannot reach it or that he is away from it. As long as he calls it , it will come. This ability allows Ippikiokami to distances at high speeds to reach its master. It will return to his hand no matter the circumstance. If something is blocking his hand or grip, ie and opponent, then the sword will still return even if it injures someone in the way. If his sword is trapped , pinned, or held by something else it will still return. If the person holding it doesn't let go, they will return with it. It is strong enough to carry a person back to Dakion.

Limitations: He cannot call it if he is already unconscious.

Needs spell check, and proof reading.
Also the sword overpowering people, and attacking people in the way is sorta abusable. There's no real weakness to this ability.

You missed a concern regarding a potential typo in the zanpakuto spirit area.

Ability: Kuikorosu Omoimiru (Devour and Reflect)

Effects: Ippikiokami would be described as a kido type zanpakuto. Dakion aims his sword at the enemy by holding it with both hands and pointing the tip of the blade straight at his target. He then closes one and and fires short burst of energy at his opponent. He can only fire 5 bursts before having to reposition himself. The bursts are small blasts, similar to the red flame kido spells. The bursts are as fast as kido spells and can be fired in any order or of any number but they can't exceed five. He can fire 1, then 2, then 2 more before having to fight normally then pull back and reposition this maneuver.

Limitations: It can only be done while in flight. He can not do this attack standing still. He must be in motion. So he can be using flash steps or flying towards an enemy to use it. It is energy blasts so they can be dodged or blocked by one powerful or fast enough. He also can't be in close quarters with the enemy so as not to hurt himself.

"He then closes one"
closes one what?

Done while using shunpo? NO. No attacks wihle using Shunpo. That would add faster than the eye can see vellocity to attacks and make it damn near impossible to dodge as it'd be done ultra fast from nearly any angle.

Ability: Gento Kisaki Gesshoku (Moon Empress Eclipse) -

Effects- Dakion makes a long slash with Ippikiokami and force a huge surge of energy through the air at a opponent. The ball of energy is black with a white outline, like a lunar eclipse, and like an eclipse, upon the dispelling of the attack a blinding light large enough to blind the radius of a football field for a few seconds. The size of the energy ball is close to 40 ft wide and 20 ft tall. It is not as fast as his Howling Cero but is 2/3 as quick.

Limitations: It is like all energy attacks and can be dodged if one is powerful or quick enough. And since the ball of energy IS energy it can be sensed and evaded by those in tune with their reiatsu.

Blinding for 100 yards is too powerful. No one in bleach moves aster than light, and any good player won't have their character expect the blinding asssault. It kinda kills the limitation that it can be dodged when someone is seeing spots, if at all.

A 40ft wide 20ft tall orb projectile on top of that?!! That's overkill.

Think in the limits of Bleach characters. We're not far beyond them if at all.

Ability: Abikyoukan Gento Kisaki (Agonizing Cries of the Moon Empress)-

Effects: A large slash is made with Ippikiokami and makes a tangible shield in the air. The shield then uses Dakion's reiatsu to shoot small red kido projectices directly in front of the shield. He instructs Ippikiokami to fire the blades with the phrase "Cry out, Ippikiokami". The shield is only as large as the slashing motion made by the sword. The projectiles are each about 5 inches in length and fire out in rapid succession from the front of the shields surface area. Whenever he moves from the spot the shield and darts vanish until the technique is used again. This ability is only used to stop an attack and quickly retaliate before moving and re-attacking as normal. The shield is circular and depends on the length of the slash. So if Dakion slices the air with a short swipe then a circle would appear over the area is blade covered. The circle is big enough to protect Dakions entire body as long as he's standing completely still.

Limitations: This shield can be broken by a powerful attack and is merely a deterrent and distraction. The projectiles only shoot directly in front of the shield. They will kill weaker hollow and only injure Shinigami. Once the shield is broken the blades immediately stop. The shield may not disperse blades if Dakion is weak because his reiatsu powers them. Dakion only uses this technique in spurts since a small amount of power is required to operate the shield.

I still don't know the size of the shield. Gotta know so your character can't just hide behind it fighting people with insufficient power to break it.
He may use it briefly, but that doesn't mean he's limited to using it for only seconds.


You still have odd formatting in your history. It's like word wrap is chopping up your sentences making your history hard to read.

[Shinigami Kyra]

Vizard Mask is already taken by a current OC Vizard Character; please change it.

[Rebel Raven]

Ability: Howling Cero

Effects: A powerful red and black cero blast shout through Dakion's mouth in hollow form. It is as fast as a bala attack and about the size of a large wolf and is in the same shape as well. So when he fires it, it flies from his mouth and at the person while making a howling sound. It moves in a linear or curved path, depending on how its aimed. It is a basically a modified cero attack.


Limitations: By it being an energy attack it can be dodged or negated completely if one's spiritual pressure is high enough. It has the same limitations of all ceros as far as accuracy and effectiveness.

How much of a curve can this take? Can it curve more than once?

She is the male version of Dakion and they have a very close relationship to the point she refers to themselves as each others "true loves."

How is she the male version of anything, and why have you missed this -three- times??

Ability: Gento Kisaki Gesshoku (Moon Empress Eclipse) -

Effects- Dakion makes a long slash with Ippikiokami and force a huge surge of energy through the air at a opponent. The orb about the size of a Volkswagen Beetle. It is not as fast as his Howling Cero but is 2/3 as quick. It is his patented "power attack" and is often used when trading energy blasts with an opponent. The impact of the attack also produces a split second flash for a 20 yard radius upon impact.

Limitations: It is like all energy attacks and can be dodged if one is powerful or quick enough. And since the ball of energy IS energy it can be sensed and evaded by those in tune with their reiatsu. The split second flash upon impact can be missed by simply closing their eyes upon the attacks impact.

We need some exact measurements. Heck if I know how large a VW Beetle is. Even if I were to look it up, is it the original, or the new one? Which model? Specefic measurements please.

Is Dakion vulnerable to the flash? Say, if someone detonated his blast prematurely with a faster assault?

Ability: Abikyoukan Gento Kisaki (Agonizing Cries of the Moon Empress)-

Effects: A large slash is made with Ippikiokami and makes a tangible shield in the air. The shield then uses Dakion's reiatsu to shoot small red kido projectices directly in front of the shield. He instructs Ippikiokami to fire the blades with the phrase "Cry out, Ippikiokami". The shield is only as large as the slashing motion made by the sword. The projectiles are each about 5 inches in length and fire out in rapid succession from the front of the shields surface area. Whenever he moves from the spot the shield and darts vanish until the technique is used again. This ability is only used to stop an attack and quickly retaliate before moving and re-attacking as normal. The shield is circular in shape. The circle is big enough to protect Dakions entire body as long as he's standing completely still. The shield's measurements would be 7 ft tall and only 3 feet wide. The shield is also black in color.

Limitations: This shield can be broken by a powerful attack and is merely a deterrent and distraction. The projectiles only shoot directly in front of the shield. They will kill weaker hollow and only injure Shinigami. Once the shield is broken the blades immediately stop. The shield may not disperse blades if Dakion is weak because his reiatsu powers them. Dakion only uses this technique in spurts since a small amount of power is required to operate the shield. It can only be maintained for up to 20 seconds. It disentegrates after 20 seconds or sooner if Dakion moves from behind it sooner. The shield can also only face one direction. It does not envelop him. It would be similar to him standing behind a wall.

Reading this, I'm not sure I like this ability. If used at close range, or closer, he could effectively attack without fear of reprisal as the shield appears, completely obscures him, blocks any attack, pretty much, and attacks at the same time, and potentially attacks in a shotgun like manner because there's no definitely dispersal pattern to the blades that fire from such a large shield.

[Rebel Raven]

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Ability: Howling Cero

Effects: A powerful red and black cero blast shout through Dakion's mouth in hollow form. It is as fast as a bala attack and about the size of a large wolf and is in the same shape as well. So when he fires it, it flies from his mouth and at the person while making a howling sound. It moves in a linear path. It is a basically a modified cero attack.

As fast as a bala? No.

Ability: Gento Kisaki Gesshoku (Moon Empress Eclipse) -

Effects- Dakion makes a long slash with Ippikiokami and force a huge surge of energy through the air at a opponent. The energy is shaped in a sickle shape or the form of a wolf fang and is about 2 ft in width and 10 ft in length. It is not as fast as his Howling Cero but is 2/3 as quick. It is his patented "power attack" and is often used when trading energy blasts with an opponent. The impact of the attack also produces a split second flash for a 20 yard radius upon impact. The split second flash does not affect Dakion.

Limitations: It is like all energy attacks and can be dodged if one is powerful or quick enough. And since the ball of energy IS energy it can be sensed and evaded by those in tune with their reiatsu. The split second flash upon impact can be missed by simply closing their eyes upon the attacks impact.

Looks like a fang in description, is ball shaped in limitations. Whazzupwiddat?

[Rebel Raven]

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