Vizard - Azuma - HLS

[aurius]

Name: Lord Azuma Fengarez
Age: 250 appears to be in late twenties
Gender: Male
Personality:

Azuma is quiet and relaxed his demeanor for the most part seems a bit uncaring and lofty, however that is the exact opposite of how Azuma is in reality he deeply cares for those around him and all Vizards in general. However his loyalty to what he calls the greater Vizard good is absolute, thus he remains cold and distance to most in order to reflect his position and authority. Azuma will never kill unless ordered to or he thinks it will benefit the Vizard race. Having been born a noble he carries him self as if he is always being watched his posture is almost perfect and he moves with a flawless elegance and grace that could only be the result of years of practice.

In combat Azuma becomes almost melancholy often expressing his wish for a peaceful resolution. However when fighting against an opponent he believes must lose or die to help further the Vizard race he remains perfectly silent rarely saying or showing anything on the surface. On the inside he converses with both his inner hollow and his zanpakuto spirit though primarily the conversations are tactical, or battle advice from one of the two spirits.

With women he doesn’t like Azuma is a perfect picture of grace and nobility. Eloquent and strong he handles himself with a level of polite coldness that normally does not offend the women, but more often than not lets them know he is not interested. However if he is attracted to a woman his demeanor shifts he becomes less cold, but much more polite and overly helpful. He is not very good with his feelings and expressing them preferring a colder sort of logic, however he is guided on the inside by his loyalty and love for Vizard race.

In a personal setting, like when he is by himself or with those he truly trusts. His demeanor has an almost total overhaul he loses the cold and noble façade that had been programmed into him in exchange for a relaxed and laid back sort of guy. In this demeanor Azuma is much less polite and more casual and tends to be a bit more fun and loud. Azuma relaxes like this very rarely however; he completely reverts to this state after drinking alcohol, for this reason Azuma tries not to drink.

Appearance:

Azuma has a solemn and world-weary look to him; his long black hair frames a face with gentle features and red eyes. Normally wearing the traditional battle armor of his noble name it consists of a red kimono with a white criss-crossing pattern and a grey trim on the short sleeves. Above that he wears black armor trimmed with red, it covers his chest, hips and groin. The shoulders have a golden spiked armor over them and he wears black bracers with a red and gold trim. The bracer extends from just above the elbow to the back of the hand and is incredibly strong capable of taking a direct sword slash without breaking.

Beneath the flowing bottom of his red kimono he wears a pair of brown pants, which give way to black knee high shin guards strapped with golden straps, which extend down to the foot. For shoes he wears black traditional monk like slippers, which while durable are also offer great support without limiting maneuverability. Over his armor he wears a purple half- toga with a purple sash over it, the half toga is draped over his right arm and flies loosely beneath the belt.

Stature wise Azuma’s baggy clothes conceal an incredibly chiseled six foot five frame, weighing roughly one hundred and eighty nine pounds. He has almost perfect posture and carries himself as if he is always being watched, a habit from his days as nobility.

Hollow Mask:

A large white pentagon shaped mask creased down the middle, it has a one inch black border and the point of the pentagon seems to extends slightly further than the rest of the sides. The mask has a large eye painted on it, it is yellow and purple and seems to be painted in the upper middle of the mask extending from where one eye should be to the other. Over the mouth is a black painting of a mouth similar to that of a Jack O’ lantern, this mouth mimics the actions of Azuma’s actual mouth and it also seems to have an infinite depth to it when open, as if you could place your hand in it and never touch anything but the darkness within.

Hollow Powers:

Along with the standard abilities tied to masks, Boost in strength, speed, mask shielding, ect.. Azumas mask gives him two additional abilities

All seeing eyes: Activate with the vocal command “Miharu” (open your eyes wide), this ability causes the eye on Azuma’s mask to glow then three more appear on each side of his head (ie. one on the left one on the righ and one behind), using this ability Azuma is immobile but is able to see everything, even the slightest motion of a bug on a blade of grass for a radius of twenty-five meters (roughly 80 feet).

Eye of the Cero: Requiring no activation command, Azuma is capable of causing the eye on his mask to glow with energy after charging for about five minutes (one post), He can cause the glowing energy in front of the eye to disappear appearing at least four feet from his intended target the glowing eye fires off an extremely powerful golden cero. (Intended target must be within 20 feet).

Inner Hollow:

Hellias is a nightmarish creature, able to open eyes anywhere on his body he is small about four feet and seems to just move rather than walk as if he is teleporting from place to place. He normaly stands hunched over with four eyes and two more on the back of his hand. Hellias has an almost reptilian look to him with the flat head of a bearded dragon and a long thin-scaled tail that ends in a needle like point. He has claws more than hands and slits for nostrils, his tongue is long and extends halfway down to the end of his body. An extremely acidic slime seems to always be dripping of Hellias singing anything near him.

Personality wise, Hellias is like an over eager butler, always referring to Azuma as Lord Fengarez. Hellias speaks as though he is always plotting something, he likes it when Azuma punishes people and calls their wounds the price of loyalty. Unlike most inner hollow Hellias has no desire to become the dominant host, saying such things are meant for the noble. For the most part Hellias remains quite except during combat often whispering into Azuma’s mind ”Release me allow me to serve you my Lord”. Hellias is also extremely snobbish thinking anyone who is not of noble birth is slime and trash. He claims to be the eternal servant to the Fengarez family the inner hollow of the most powerful members of the royal house. Azuma is not sure if this true or not but it might be because the eye on his mask seems to family symbol seen on the mask of the oldest son of every generation. Hellias’s voice is soft and scratchy he often sounds like a whisper. He also hates Azuma’s zanpkauto spirit though he will never openly say it his tone and demeanor reveal it, he is the only one of them who calls Shain “Mr. Mitsukai”

Hellias’s inner world is a large black mansion with no exits, outside of the windows seems to be a black swirling void. The mansion it self is quite amazing being able to reshape and redesign it’s self at Hellias’s command. Hellias keeps the place perfectly clean and normally remains in the corner in case his Lord should visit. The mansion it self while instable in structure because it can shift rapidly, normally has a late Victorian décor with gold trim and angels. Red curtains and carpets, and large beds with curtains and cloth roofs.

Zampakuto's name:

Shainingu Mitsukai (Shining angel)

Zampakuto Spirit:

Shainingu Mitsukai or Shain for short has glowing white skin and wings, his very presence is slightly painful to the eyes, he normally wears a red bandana which covers his eyes, and a red chest and bottom wrap created by folding red cloth over the body to create a short toga like top and a half dress bottom. On his right hand and both feet he wears a black bracer and boots with a gold trim. His wings are larger than his body by roughly two feet and are formed of glowing white feather. Stature wise Shain is about six foot five and has an incredibly muscular physic.

Shain is calm reserved and quite like Azuma, he however has little to no mercy in him, he believes in the law of absolutes you either with the Vizard cause or you are against it. For the most part Shain chooses not to speak he believes that Azuma must learn through making his own mistakes however he cares greatly for Azuma, and often takes the roll of the stern and silent teacher. In training Shain is ruthless and cold demanding absolute obedience so Azuma can unleash his full power, during training is the only time that Shain takes the dominant role in the relationship. He has a distain for the ugly hollow Hellias but like Hellias will never openly say this.

Shain’s world has two sections, the first is a stone room, six by six feet and eight feet high it looks like a chamber from an Egyptian tomb. The only source of light is a white glow that emanates from a mural in the front of the room, the only wall different from the other three plain stonewalls. The mural is a carved picture of Shain with the words “shinjitsu o ooi nasai, Shainingu Mitsukai” written beneath. The mural form of Shain can move and speak on its two-dimensional plane.

The second half of the world was revealed to Shain when he achieved bankai. By saying his bankai release phrase in front of the wall. Azuma can cause it to collapse into an incredibly bright room, with a glass bridge leading to a large glowing platform. The walls of the room are made of a transparent crystal with light flowing through it like water. The long arching bridge leads to transparent throne where his zanpakuto spirit sits. The throne itself appears to be similar to the walls made of the transparent crystal with light flowing through it like water, however the difference lies in the light where as in the walls the light is a bright white, the light from the throne is shining gold.

Un-released Zampakuto's Appearance:

Refer to character picture,

Azuma’s sealed zanpakuto has a golden hilt with a brown wrap over the handle; the wrap has several orange diamonds along it. The plane black sheath has a purple string wrapped around it about a foot below the handle, he uses these strings to secure his blade to his purple sash, the knot he uses is very stable but when pulled at the correct angle will easily release so he can remove both sword and sheath. The blade of the weapon is roughly three and a half feet long and made of pure polished silver that always seems to have a faint glow. A half-centimeter groove runs along the non-sharp side of the blade, the weapon remains pristinely clean no matter what any blood or dirt that hit’s it almost immediately glows slightly then disappears.

Shikai Release phrase::

“shinjitsu o ooi nasai, Shainingu Mitsukai” (obscure the truth, shining angel)

Shikai Appearance::

The appearance of Azuma’s released weapons is pretty unremarkable, all that happens is a light translucent wave of energy passes down over Azuma and his blade completely vanishes both sword and sheath. A short while after the release three small gold spikes protrude from his bracers, each spike is roughly one inch long. The spikes are spaced evenly along the forearm of the bracer one towards the hand, one towards the elbow, and one in the center.

(wait time till spikes: one post)

Shikai Abilities::

Blades of light: Azuma can fire invisible blades from his appendages, the blades will take a spear shape, or if he swings an appendage to create it, it will take the shape of a crescent moon. The blades are formed by solidifying light outside of the visible spectrum and can be fired up to fifteen feet. They are completely invisible and cannot be seen by the naked eye. They emit no light or heat however can be seen in the ultra-violet spectrum. The crescent blades are significantly stronger than the spear like ones.

Blast of light: Basically a pulse wave with a radius of ten feet, Azuma can release a shockwave by solidifying the light outside of the visible spectrum around him and then sending it flying from his body like a wall. This move is strong and can block mid-low level kido and down. As well as some cero’s as long as someone stronger than him does not fire it. The technique is activated by Azuma throwing his hands to either side of his body his palms facing out.

Invisibility: Pretty self-explanatory Azuma can cycle his reiatsu through the light around him shifting the visible spectrum turning him completely invisible and removing any trace of his reiatsu. In this mode Azuma cannot use either of his other shikai abilities. The technique lasts for a maximum of three posts and has a five-post cool down before it can be used again. It is activated through the verbal command “Bakuzen” (obscure different form of the word then in release phrase).

Note: Azumas shikai works even in the dimmest of light however in complete darkness it is utterly useless.

Bankai Description:

In his bankai form Azuma as well as everything he wears turns bone white (this includes clothes, hair , skin, everything.). Along with the bone white appearance two other things change as well, the first being he grows a pair of glowing white wings, the wings glow at a special light frequency causing Azuma’s movements to seem to be blurred or smeared rather than sharp or crisp, the smearing is not incredibly long about an inch and a half behind his movements and looks like a partial after image. The wings themselves are non-corporeal they cannot be cut but they cannot block anything. Anything that touches them will pass right through the emerged part being bathed in a bright light. The second major change comes from the spikes, which now sprout a curved blade along the length of the bracer, it does not stick out beyond the bracer and is curved inward to prevent attacks from sliding towards his hands or arms. The blades themselves have no markings and are as strong as a zanpakuto, they are gold in color and roughly one inch thick decreasing into a sharp edge.

The transformation into bankai is completely different from shikai. First his body begins to glow with increasingly brilliant light, until it is almost unbearable to look at him. Then the light swirls around him making an almost cocoon like surrounding, then the wings burst out with a shockwave of energy, revealing his fully formed bankai (no wait time for the blades).


His bankai release phrase is:
“Raito wo akiraka nishinasai, Shainingu Mitsukai” (Reveal the light, shining angel)

Bankai Abilities:

Shining blades of light: Similar to blades of light, Azuma can fire blades from his appendages, the blades will take a spear shape, or if he swings an appendage to create it, it will take the shape of a crescent moon. The blades are formed by solidifying light within the visible spectrum and can be fired up to fifteen feet. These blades are composed of bright shining light upon impact they explode, the blast is not very strong but it does some damage and multiple attacks can build up. The explosions of energy from these attacks have a total foreward momentum, meaning the blast is directed in the direction the blade is flying.

Shining pulse of light: Similar to pulse of light, it is basically a pulse wave with a radius of ten feet. This pulse has the same effect as pulse of light but it is not invisible instead it shines with golden light and when it hits his opponent it binds him/her in a wrap of light for a few minutes (1 post). The wrap of light simply makes the person appear like they are glowing, all damage done to a person in wrap of light is halved, and shining pulse of light is activated in the same way pulse of light is.
(By damaged is halved, I mean like if he cut through some one’s arm it would not remove the arm but make a deep gash. Azuma cannot kill his opponent while he is binded.)

Flare: The wings on Azuma’s back flare with blinding light (think the sun bright) at the same time hundreds of small shrapnel shards of light form within this flash firing out of the Azuma at the center of the flash. These shards will stick to the first thing they touch and then exploded with a forward directed blast away from Azuma. This technique has an eight-foot radius and a four-post cool down. Flare is activated by the vocal command "Go Kai" (reveal).

Skill Level: Kidou: Advanced
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Intermediate
Skill Level: Shunpou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Advanced
History/Background:

Azuma was born a Vizard, born to the noble house of Fengarez it seemed from a young age that his destiny was fixed he would become a commander in the Vizard army just like every Fengarez first born before him. He was little, about five years old when he first discovered his inner hollow. Back then Hellias was far from the humble servant he is today no he was a vile and disgusting creature who loved to torment Azuma in his sleep, sending images of horror and destruction into the young boys mind. On the night of his sixth birthday Azuma woke up in the middle of the night screaming in horror. His father then the commander of the combat division and one of the most respected commanders in the army burst into the room zanpakuto drawn. After hearing his sons story he was furious yelling that his inner hollow is nothing more than a tool like the zanpakuto, useful only to help him grow stronger. That night Azuma’s father, Izuru handed him a wooden practice sword and took him to the dojo, to ”Train the fear out of him”. Azuma trained harder than he had ever trained and will ever train his father drove him to his breaking point and when he finally collapsed from exhaustion his father hit him until he stood. This was the first of many training lessons some times they would go on for days, with no breaks, no food, no water. However despite the cruel harshness of his father Azuma respected and idolized him for his strength and his

The grueling trials of his childhood molded Azuma into silent and powerful warrior, while training for the army he was considered the best, to have no equal among the recruits. However Azuma felt empty his only friend was Hellias his inner hollow, now humbled by the raw determination of Azuma, Hellias pledged his life in servitude to his new master ”Lord Fengarez”. About mid way through his thirty years of training to enter the masked army was the first time he released his zanpkauto, the release phrase had trickled into his mind the voice that whispered it was warm and comforting “shinjitsu o ooi nasai, Shainingu Mitsukai”. It was on that day Azuma had his first conversation with Shain, Hellias took an immediate dislike to the spirit for not using a formal greeting when addressing Azuma.

Azuma was accepted into the masked army under the position of Lieutenant of the command division. His uncle Senru Fengarez the high commander of the masked army, took an immediate dislike to him. Senru never like his brother and Azuma was his father’s son, lofty, cold, despondent, and polite to the point of being arrogant. Senru sent him on the hardest missions made him train longer and harder than nay other member of the division. Azuma bared it all with his normal relaxed and cold demeanor, after twenty years he became captain of the command division, his uncle had now, actually grown slightly fond of him now and trusted him as the captain of the squad.

It was fifty years before Azuma was promoted again in that time Azuma proved himself to have a brilliant tactical mind, a keen sense of perception, and invaluable skill on the battlefield. The day of his promotion was one of the proudest days of Azuma’s life; his father and uncle both congratulated him on the achievement and that night he learned that he couldn’t handle liquor all that well. As a captain Azuma lead his squad with fearless determination and a gentle hand, he trained with even the lowest level of members and soon formed a tight bond with his men, the next seventy years of his life, were some of the happiest days of his life. Soon him and his men became close friends and Azuma could open up to them. After many years Azuma was sent on a mission to repel a group of hollow heading for the base, him and his men went out there and found nothing. On the return trip as if from out of nowhere three of Azuma’s men disappeared. Azuma searched for days but found no trace of the men eventually returning to the base.

It was twenty years after the incident and seventy years after his promotion to captain, that Azuma was promoted again to the position of Major. On the night of his promotion Senru came to him and revealed he wanted to put him on a new assignment. Senru took him to secret facility and revealed that he has been working on creating the perfect Vizard warrior through genetic manipulation and he wanted Azuma to lead the operation as his liaison to the researchers. At first Azuma thought of this as an honor until he found out that the subjects were Vizards who had disappeared on missions, kidnapped to become guinea pigs for his uncles project. He brought this information to his father and they confronted his uncle in the secret facility. Azuma was shocked when he discovered that his father had known all about the project and even more shocked when his father sliced him along the back. It was on that night on the verge of death that Azuma discovered his bankai, using his release he killed his father and his uncle and then destroyed the lab.
The next morning he submitted himself and his family to the Vizard council of nobles, saying he will take any punishment necessary in order to make sure that no one hears of his family’s shame. The Vizard’s agreed that his uncle and fathers crimes would be kept a secret and Azuma would be banished for a hundred years under the pretense of a long-term mission. Azuma spent the next hundred years wondering Hueco Mundo he trained everyday and every night for a hundred years. He worked on his Bankai and his Shikai and practiced strategy maneuvers with his inner hollow and Aanpakuto spirit. Now one hundred years have past and he emerges from the woods to once again serve the Vizard race.

RP Sample:

Azuma woke up in the middle of the night sensing a reiatsu, he quickly recognized it as his uncle Senru’s relaxing a bit as the commander walked into the room. As Azuma sat up Senru spoke ”Azuma you have proven yourself to me with your proficiency in battle, skill as a leader, and most importantly your unwavering loyalty. As you know the Vizard race has always been fighting with one enemy or the next, hollows are coming closer and closer to the bases walls, and fear that without stronger warriors we shall lose. Now get dressed I have something to show you”. Azuma sat up quickly getting dressed and following the commander out into the main head quarters and through a secret passage in the floor of the research barracks.

He followed the commander down the staircase into a large underground chamber the wall lined with large glowing green tubes. ”Welcome Azuma to the future of the Vizard race, here we are forming the new generations of our species. You see a Vizard is a fusion of a Hollow and a Shinigami. So if we remove the Hollow part and put back in a stronger one that has been rendered effectively brain dead, the result is an incredibly powerful Vizard. Unfortunately all of our efforts so far have been unsuccessful, that’s where you come in I want you to head this operation along with a researcher which you can pick and I approve of course”. Azuma looks around the room the glowing green tanks have shadowy silhouettes in them and computer equipment flashes lightly in a circle in the center of the room. ”Who are these Vizards where did they come from?” Senru walks over putting one arm over Azuma ”these are the men who best serve the Vizard nation here as test subjects… Think about my offer I will return at dawn for my answer.”

Azuma paces the floor of the chamber for an hour his footsteps echoing against the glowing tanks, walking slowly over to one of the tanks rubbing dust off a golden plate it reads;

Test subject 004,
Name: Haru Suzuki
Division: Stealth

The name seemed familiar it lingered in the back of his head for two hours as he strolled around the complex. It hit him like a hammer the name was on the list of men who had gone missing like his own. Running over to the computer he looked through the files of all members who had disappeared that way to find they are gone. All trace of his men and those others just gone, it made no sense. He burst out of the secret room convinced Senru was behind it all he returned home and stormed into his father’s chambers.

”Father get up, Senru has betrayed us all. I have seen it with my own eyes our comrades bottled and genetically altered to feed his deluded mind come quickly we have to put a stop to this at once.”
”I would see this for my self, have you told any others?”
”No father just you, this is first and foremost a family matter after all”

Azuma watched as his father rose from his bed stepping onto the cold stone floor he pats Azuma on the back as he stands to get dressed. Azuma leads his father back to the underground research chamber where his uncle stands behind a terminal sealing the doors behind them as they enter. He steps towards Senru drawing his blade as he made his way towards him stopping with his blade pointing at Senru’s neck.

”Senru Fengarez I arrest you for the charge of high treason against the Vizard race. You will submit and come in for questioning and to receive your appropriate punishment”
”I told you Senru he is to young to know of this, and now you have jeopardized our entire operation over your attachment to this fool son of mine… I guess I should say former son.”

Azuma didn’t even have the time to react when the icy cold blade slid down his back mixing with the warm blood. His Zanpakuto spirit spoke softly into his mind.
”You will only have one chance at this, justice must be served otherwise you will die”
His inner hollow grasped into his mind the reptilian horror’s scratchy voice echoing through his thoughts.
“For once I will agree with Mr. Mitsukai, your father and uncle have proven themselves unworthy of their royal blood”
”How the two of them are too powerful, too strong I have no chance”

Azuma opened his eyes in a small stone chamber a mural of his angelic Zanpakuto spirit carved in front of him the words to release his shikai began to blur than faded shifting slowly the letters morphed and rearranged now reading “Raito wo akiraka nishinasai, Shainingu Mitsukai”. Azuma spoke the words slowly they had familiar feeling on his tongue, like the name of an old friend. As he finished speaking, the words began to glow with a white light then the outline of the mural itself burst into light closing in towards the center until the entire wall is bathed in white light. The light faded and the wall was gone, before Azuma lay a large dome like room, the walls of the room are made of a transparent crystal with light flowing through it like water.

Azuma takes a step out onto a clear glass bridge looking below there is only bright light. Taking a deep breath to steady himself he steps forward placing his full weight onto the bridge and walking up and over the arch. As he walks over the top of the bridge a large glowing platform comes into view in the middle is a golden glowing throne. Sitting on the throne is a muscular angel with a red bandana and red wrap around clothing over his chest and hips. As Azuma walks over the angel stands, Azuma recognizes him immediately;

”Shain”
”Welcome Azuma, this is my home the piece of your soul that I reside within. You know stand on the brink of destruction, you are bleeding badly and unless you unleash bankai your uncle and father will soon kill you”
”But I don’t know how”
”You know, you have always known. My name reveals it I am the angel of light, the bringer of divine balance.”
”The words on the wall... are the release. I understand I shall release your true power.
”Not yet, first you must prove your heart is worthy of wielding such power.”

Shain rose from his throne gesturing for Azuma to sit. As Azuma lowered himself into the chair he felt a warm and calm serenity wash through his body, as if everything was going to be all right a perfect sense of peace. Then it gripped him like a soft tingle at first and then a roaring typhoon of energy, the pain seared through his mind his vision ravaged by blinding light. His head rand and every nerve cell in his body screamed with pain, it felt like he was being burned alive. His eyes and mouth and ears fired out light from within his body as the swirling glowing light swirled around him as if dancing to his screams. Then suddenly it ended the pain disappeared smoke rose from his body and his body shook. Azuma sat for five minutes not moving not saying a word finally he spoke his words cold and relaxed.

”I understand, thank you Shain”

The two stood bowing to one another as the world around Azuma fades away and he hits the floor after the slice, blood drooling out his back. His father raises his sword above his head, swinging his blade down to impale his son through the heart. Azuma spoke his words barely a whisper.

“Raito wo akiraka nishinasai, Shainingu Mitsukai”. The words came out perfectly and fluently like he had said them a thousand times before. Suddenly Azuma burst into blinding light his father and uncle shielding their eyes as he emerges bone with glowing wings. He slams his palms out to the side the glowing golden pulse firing from his body and suspending his uncle and father. He then slices his way out of the building as his father and uncle begin to free them selves he calls out as he soars through the tunnel created by the constant firing of his blades.

"Sprinkled on the bones of the beast! Sharp tower, red crystal, steel ring. Move and become the wind, stop and become the calm. The sound of warring spears fills the empty castle! Hado 63 Raikoho."

Azuma emerges from the building as the bolt of lightning like energy fires down from the sky, jumping out of the way the yellow energy surges down behind Azuma’s foot flying through the hole made by Azuma blasting into his uncle and father and flinging them down into an inferno of fire as the equipment in the labs overloads and explodes. Azuma stood the fire reflected in his eyes, within he feels no pride, no relief, only sorrow it had come to this, and yet at the same time no guilt, no remorse.

This is just a short sample to give you a feel for the all-seeing eyes ability:

Azuma walked to the edge of the canyon, the towering walls rose up on either side of him, behind him his men stood in perfect formation waiting for his orders. Reaching up with his hand he holds it in front of his face his fingers snapping apart as a mask forms on his face. The elongated pentagon shaped mask, has a yellow and purple eye on it and a wicked Jack O’lantern like mouth. “Miharu” as he spoke three glowing eyes opened up each available space to the sides and back of Azuma’s head the one in front connected to the mask flares with energy. Suddenly Azuma is completely unaware of his physical self but can see everything for eighty feet. He watches as a small bug scurries across the dessert sand. Then he saw them, four hollow in the canyon and two at the end. They were large and mean looking, every inch of their body was covered in small blades.

Azuma breathed deep his mask fading off as he regains his composure, his mind still adjusting to switching back to the individual sight. ”There are five hollow in total I want groups three and four to use kido and support us from the canyon walls, the rest of you with me and stay on the alert we’ll hit three and they have two more for back up.”

[aurius]

DONE ;D

[Ai]

For the most part everything looks fine. I just have a few things want to go over.

How was he born a Vizard? They're not exactly a race determined by birth. Like a Quincy is really just a human who has received specific spiritual training in the methods of the Quincy to become one of the Monks of Destruction. A Vizard is initially a Shinigami who through some sort of set of circumstances have had the variation of their soul that is their Hollow-self take form as part of their soul. So how was he born with his Hollow-self (Inner-Hollow) already apart of him?

Then the Invisibility, tone that down just slightly, a lot can happen in 5 posts. Also, can his reiastu still be sensed by his opponent when invisible? If he's hit while invisible does he still remain invisible? Also the cooldown time should be longer than that the time it can keep running, otherwise it can just run indefinitely, which is sorta'... eh...

Lastly, the wings for the Bankai - that needs a little bit of clarification. Because a Bankai amplifies a Shinigami/Vizard's powers immensely, so he's already going to be faster as a result; but going by your description of what the wings do - is that to say if a Shinigami or Vizard with "Advanced" Shunpou also use their Bankai (which in turn makes them even faster) he'll still be faster than them because of his wings?

[aurius]

Alright, I toned down the invisibility and I removed the speed for Bankai because your right it's redundant.

As far as the born a Vizard comment is concerned, to be honest im not entirely sure how that works either, however on the site story line which introduces the vizard army it states:

Meanwhile, Shinji and his group discover that they were not the first. Millions of years prior, before the noble houses had even stopped warring, there had been Vizards. These Vizards were considered "True Vizards" by their peers, having been born with the mask.

So I thought I would stick with that.

Thanks for responding so quickly, your awesome for that ;D

[Ai]

lol Yeah, I don't exactly know how that works, either, for the "True Vizard", but well, that can be hashed out via RP.



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