Arrancar application

[kyuushi]

Arrancar Application

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In Character

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General Information
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name: Kyuushi:
age: 200:
appearing age: 24:
gender: male:
race: adjuchas:
rank: fracción:
number: 58:

Appearance

Long white hair
1,80m tall
goth/rock style
blue/gray eyes
white skin
around 60 kg
normal build
few muscle's
long black coat
goggles around his neck
zanpaktou in his sleeve of his left arm.

Personality

He is always calm, except when his opponent is annoying him.
he doesnt talk much, but he speaks, his words cut like a sword.
he wants to finish the fight as soon as possible, so he always go 100% on his opponent.
he loves the have company, but u wont see that in his emotions.
he is a sneaky person. always gone when they aren't looking. and attack when you least expect it.
he never has his arms in the sleeves, but he wears the coat like everyone else.

History

kyuushi was a normal boy at school that never believed in something spiritual. but at one day, his town was destroyed by something. he was the only one to see the hollow. the hollow noticed him and followed him around town. kyuushi couldnt escape the hollow and ran into someone's house. the hollow destroyed the house within a second. kyuushi died, and when he came underneath the rubble, the hollow was waiting for him. and ate him.

in hollow form, he managed to survive easily. but then he ran into aizen. who transformed him into a arrancar. from that point on, he swore loyalty to aizen. he always kept himself in the shadow, but still able to act quick if needed.
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Skills
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Skills

• Swordsmanship- Advanced
  
• Cero - Advanced
  
• Sonído - Intermediate
  
• Hand to Hand -Intermediate
  

Attributes

• Speed - Advanced
  
• Power - Advanced
  
• Stamina - Intermediate
  
• Intelligence - Intermediate
  

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Powers
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Natural Powers

• Bala
  
• Garganta
  
• Resurrección
  
• Sonído

Arrancar Abilities

Bala kuoo (rain of hollow bullets)

• Kyuushi fires a lot of cero bullets at the target -
  
• Cero -
  
• close ranged, high hit rate/far ranged, low hit rate. -
  
• he can always fire this attack. but the more he uses it, the less power it will have. -
  

Gobou kiru (Pentakill)

• kyuushi flashes away and starts to dash toward the enemy. when he hits the enemy, he flashes away to another spot. the does that 5 times to create a pentagram -
  
• Sword skill-
  
• Close -
  
• once until rested, twice when he is angry. -
  

Kage suraisu (shadow slice)

• each attack has its own shadow, wich means that even if the attack misses, there is a second invisible sword that will hit the target. the more energy that has been put in the attack, the more hits. -
  
• Sword skill-
  
• Close -
  
• Passive-
  

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• this attack is the strongest in his normal form. you see the air bending in the way he moved. this attack is a high speed flash, with high accuracy. wat he does in his attack, is still unknow. that is because his attack is to fast to see. -
  
• Sword skill-
  
• Close -
  
• unknown-

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Zanpakutō
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Name: kyoukan matsuro
''assassins fate''
Call Out Phrase: ''tobikosu kyoukan!''
''Leap assassin!''

Appearance

the blade has the length of a normal katana, but slightly longer.
when this sword is in its socket, it has the length of 20 cm. this is all for the fact he can wear it in his sleave. it has a little red orb at the end of the handle. this is thrown in the air when he uses his resurrección.

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Resurrección
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Appearance

when he uses his resurrección, he flips the orb into the air and dissapears. the orb starts to glow, and then releases a big flash. within a second there is kyuushi in his full form. he appears like a robot lookalike. his feet are full with armor, but with those he can run extremely fast. his facemask turned into cat ears. the orb that was on his sword, now apears to be at the place of his heart. he has a tail but the tail got spikes all over. his fist now have razor sharp blades running down from the tip of his fingers to his hand. on his arms he also got 1 blade to cut when he misses his punch.

Abilities

sutore-topanchi (straight punch)

• with the speed he has now, he is able to move with a blink of an eye. he makes a distraction move to the side, but he actualy rushes right at the enemy and punches in his stomach. -
  
• punch -
  
• close -
  
• no limit -
  

Bala hirameku (hollow bullet thunder)

• at great distance, he punches wildly in the air to fire cero bullets. a better variation on his bala kuoo. -
  
• cero -
  
• very far -
  
• charge needed -
  

seishou myaku (energy pulse)

• the ultimate attack of kyuushi. he stores alot of energy in his hands, that he can use to punch the enemy. he uses his ultimate speed to get to the enemy. when the hit lands, so much power is transfered, that she victim will be send airborn with a loud bang, breaking the sound barier. kyuushi flashes to another spot for the second hit with his other hand. fast, and deadly. -
  
• cero/ punch -
  
• close -
  
• one time use on hollow form. to use again he has to charge for 3 full days. -

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OOC Information

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Sample Post
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Rules and Guide Agreement
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• Have you read the full rules of this site, including Xat rules, and understand them? Y
  
• Have you read through the Arrancar Application Guide? Y
  
• How many Characters do you currently posses?
  0
  
  

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[Rebel Raven]

Hello, I'll be reviewing your application.

Lets get this out of the way firstly. An Adjuchas cannot have arrancar powers because they are not an arrancar.

Secondly, I wouldn't readily say your character will be a fraccion.

Moving on, your appearance needs a lot more work. A list will absolutely not cut it.

The Personality is in no way close to what we expect in terms of length, detail, and I don't get how one can wear a coat "like everyne else" without their arms in the sleeves. Is it worn about the neck like a cape?
And even more damning,

he loves the have company, but u wont see that in his emotions.

REALLY?! "u" in place of you?
You have time to work on your application. Enough time to add the y and o to that u.

His race would be arrancar if he became an arrancar.

The history is abysmally short. We do understand it can be hard to write up a history for any sort of Hollow, but the length you have is not acceptable.

You have a messed up block quote in your app.

Bala Kuoo is unacceptable. There's next to no description to this ability in every section. Bala are not a cero. What do you expect of this power against people lower than your character's tier, the same tier, and above tier?

Gobou kiru has many of the same problems as Bala Kuoo in having a piss poor description, plus hit the opponent with what, exactly? And even if the first hit happens you absolutely cannot guarentee the others will.

Kage suraisu: You just can't word out powers very well, can you? No description, a bullshit non existent limitation, and you think it'll always hit? Well fuck you. That's not how it works here.

nanosekando: the application template CLEARLY says 3 powers. And again this power is pure bullshit. Aizen would Assuredly know what he does in this attack being VASTLY more powerful. Considering the actual work put into this application I can safely say that if I were so lenient as to allow this mindless application to be accepted that Yuzu urosaki (Not a typo. I mean the Kursaki sibling that can't even -see- spirits) would be vastly stronger than your character and could see every move your character makes.

Further expanding on this shitty ability, there's no imitation, and frankly you're a moron for thinking we'd allow any of these abilities.

Who the FUCK would want to fight your character and put up with these childish powers? No one on this board, I'm sure.

An Ajuchas woud not have a zanpakuto so make up your goddamn mind! Ajuchas don't have , a Zanpakuto or Ressureccion because they're already in their hollow form.

Lets move on. Zanpakuto... So your zapakuto changes length to allow him to wear it up his sleeve? No.

Ressureccion:when he uses his resurreccion, he flips the orb into the air and dissapears...where does he go when he disappears?

Armor+speed? Bullshit. No. A blade you word that it always hits when he mises a punch? Fuck no.

sutore-topanchi: You do realize that people that are stronger than your character, and even if your application was a thousand times better than it is, there would be people stronger would see through the super speed illusion.

I'll say it now, you are an asshole who did not read the powers guide because super speed, and the illusions you're trying to bullshit your way in to are not allowed powers. You're a shining example of why because you're CLEARLY not responsible enough to have them.

And "no limit" my ass. Fuck you.

Bala hirameku: Bala Kuoo was a shitty entry, and you're not getting a "better" version of it because of that.

seishou myaku: The only power you even attempted to balance (You still failed fucking miserably, but you tried) is still unacceptable because you're assming you hit people, and you'r assuming you have "ultimate speed" which is laughable in it's own right. Then the limitation is pure bullshit. 3 days doesn't mean a while lot when one could loophole it to say 3 days go by in a post, or go from fight to fight saying 3 days passed in between each one.

Again, none of the super speed power are allowable.

While I'm at it, I'm calling bullshit on the grimmjow/aizen bastardized ressureccion form.

Lets see, sample p-... you lazy fuck! You didn't even bother with a sample post? I call that an act of mercy on your part so I don't have to read what no doubt would be the worst RP I've seen on an application. So, yeah, thanks for stopping the lame attempt to make a character.

So all in all, your application needs a lot of work. I'm going to allow you to fix it in the marginal hope that you have any sort of potential. To help you out, why not look at accepted applications to see just what we expect?

Do not post in this thread save to say you've made modifications. Let it be known to you that if I do not see a gigantic leap forward in the quality of this application I'm denying it.

If you decide this is to much for you to handle, for what ever reason, you're more than welcome to post that you're givig up and this application will be moved to the unaccepted bin.

[Arja]

Archived due to inactivity