D-masses #2 All kind of awesome

[dmass]

Name: Lord von King
Age: 300
Gender: Male
Personality:

He is the type of man to scream his moves before using them. Not because he has honor or justice but because it's cool. He is a pure rocker in every sense of the word and exudes the power of manliness at every chance he gets. He lives his life hard fast and on the edge even his walk has an air of power to it.

When he speaks he believes all will listen, and believes all will hang on his every word you can’t even tell him otherwise so yes he stubborn as all hell is hot.

He has base intelligence that makes him a small very small cut above some arrancar i.e. the dumb ones (really dumb ones). So yeah he is not very bright in terms of intelligence.

In short He is loud, conceited, reckless, stupid, stubborn and don’t forget overly cocky so he is an all around how the hell did he live this long type of guy.

Appearance:

He is tall by human standards a cool 6'12 natural (As he puts it) Yeah 7ft and 200lbs even. His hair is bright blonde and long very long it touches the ground (his hair is taller than he is). His mask looks like visor style glasses with a black tint (he can't see anyway). His head is almond shaped with a very pointed chin with no facial hair. He wears a normal sized top hat making his height even greater (7'4). His body is very slender much more slender than Nnorita's. His arrancar uniform his is completely unique. He wears a vest without sleeves. In fact it looks similar too lilynetts vest only that it is closed with a zipper that’s right a zipper. He wears gloves but they are cut at the fingers. He wears long yet very form fitting white arrancar pants. His arracar boots are plat for boots adding yet three more inches to his height.

His hole is visible on his lower stomach just above his pelvic region.

Final height 7'7 200lbs

Arrancar Powers:

Segunda vista: This power is active at all times. He feels all vibrations in the air and ground 100ft around him (key word around him) and it makes a clear picture for him. This makes it hard to sneak up on him and since he is loud he often sees by talking a lot.

Senoia Negro: It’s a blast of sonic energy that is visible as distortion in the air. This skill can cause light damage to those around him and a bad case of ringing ears. The shockwave fires in a 360degree radius around him like sound would. This could hurt those around him that
Are weaker than he (two levels or more). They are knocked back with the sonic power the full 200 ft how they land is up to them they wont be able to hear for about 3 post and it will come back slowly after that. Near strength (one level up or down) they are knocked back 150 feet and cant hear for 1 post it comes back after that. For those who are stronger than he if they are not on solid footing they can get sent flying 50 feet at most and they can still hear but there ears will at least be ringing for a bit.

Natural Arrancar Powers:

Sonido: His Sonido is fast enough to leave two after images but he can only use sonido once a while (5 post cool down)

Pequstia: similar to the spirit ribbons lets him find who he is looking for.

Sexy Cero: makes his lips look like he is going to kiss you then launches fast moving cero thin cero beam the pierces rather then explodes.

Zanpakuto's name:

bailarina de ensueño

Un-released Zanpakuto's Appearance:

The body looks like a battle Axe guitar very similar to Gene Simmons of KISS it has two pick ups 8 machine heads 8 strings the axe part is very functional the blade white to match his clothes the guitar has no sheath so he wears it like a guitar on a strap over his shoulder.

Resurrección Release phrase::

Nota de mi amor!!

Resurrección Appearance::

The body looks like a battle Axe guitar very similar to Gene Simmons of KISS it has two pick ups 8 machine heads 8 strings the axe part is very functional the blade white to match his clothes. The guitar has no sheath so he wears it like a guitar on a strap over his shoulder.

His zanpaktou becomes a full sized axe like the second espada. The guitar is blood red now and much longer than before. The guitar also grows 4 more machine heads and strings becoming a 12-string guitar. His mask becomes an X shape and revels his red left eye and his white right one the mask points extend off his face with the nose as the mask center.
He loses the vest for a zebra print fuzzy boa around his neck his pants are still tight his boots are slightly taller

Resurrección Abilities::

Canciones del alma!: strumming Zanpaktou has a Variety of effects.


Song 1: song of pleasure. Its anything but pleasure this song is a hell on earth. Their effects are devastating to the surroundings and to lord he. the effects are similar a constant barrage of Sinfonía Negro. Long slow power chords one after another. If he uses this move in succession he will become highly fatigued. It’s a fast pace rapid-fire riff of metal proportions



Song 2: The last dance part one. This song creates a dome (100 ft around think about it) barrier that causes a vibration sensation when you touch. The harder you touch the more it vibrates your body you hit it too hard you may pass out. This wall is easily taken out by a spiritual attack from anyone but the wall stay will up otherwise or until you beat the king. The song starts off at mid-tempo electric yet clean ending in slow smooth acoustic sounding end. When the song starts the dome materializes around him then spreads as the song's tempo increases. after the song is done the barrier becomes stationary.

El poder de la música.: He can fly on the guitar (like a surf board) at greater speeds than normal. It is sub-sonido thought.

Skill Level: Kidou: Advanced
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Beginner
Skill Level: Sonido: Advanced
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Intermediate
History/Background:

It was the late 1600s there was a young violinist named Nicholas. He tried very hard to scrap a living as traveling performer but alas his life was tragic and quite sad. He died a lonely poor cold man frozen to the streets of Paris. That was his life like so many starving artist of his time it was a fate best suited for him to die with no one because it was well known fact, in a time of great masters who wanted to hear his mediocre sound.

As a ghost without a form he watched the world grow around him. As music changed as the streets became asphalt from cobblestone as wars were fought and lost and won. His time as a spirit was grand as last he didn’t hunger or thirst death at last he no longer felt the chills of the winters nipping on cold toes. Death was grand for one such as him in fact he fancied travel as well.

He traveled from Americas to hear the music that was now classic, but to him was still as new as when he tried to play in his time. He realized that music still held deep with him. Nicholas set his eyes to travel to the orient which back in his day was a dangerous trip, now they had their own music that is considered classic it was all so beautiful to him. He soon made his trip to Japan.

It was a bustling place and the sounds of a new sound filled the air jazz it was the 1940s now cars were the main mode of transportation and horses were becoming rare. All was nice and nothing was amiss. He had no clue he was going to be eaten most don’t he was no exception.

The hollow he became was pale in comparison of what he once was. He was no longer refined being he was a wild beast in love with a new style of music called rock after the war Japan gained a huge influx of American “western music”. His real self would have this music as a disgrace to the olden days but his hollow self loved it in fact he targeted musicians of that genre just to hear them play that sound he loved. The he evolved when the music evolved, Into a Gillian.

When he became Gillian he was rocking out to the sounds of Black Sabbath and Alice Cooper and Kiss. As a Gillian he came to human world whenever he could just to hear those sounds and every time he was pulled back by other Gillian’s. This personality of his made him unique in as a Gillian and soon evolved once more. When music changed he changed once more.

He was not an adjucha for very long. But his time as one was full of his favorite style of metal Glam You can say it was 20 years then he was accidently exposed to the hyogokyu. How accidental you ask? Aizen dropped it when he came to Hueco Mundo Aizen picked it up looked at noticed it was slightly weaker keep moving on Gin made a snide comment Aizen smiled and then they went on their way. Lord soon slithered by the drop site touched where it landed then became an arrancar. Because it was so incomplete he lost his sight and his powers changed from when he was a hollow to how they are now.

When he became an arrancar the music was the fair it is now punk, pop, emo but he hated it all. He decided to bring on to himself to bring back to awesome that was Glam metal and the manliness that it held with his super powers of awesome but he was naked.

RP Sample:

ALLLLLL YEAHHHHHH" he screamed at the top of his lungs in the white desert. The sand moved ever so slightly in a shockwave at the power his voice created. The young arrancars quivered in fear of this loud but powerful looking being. His arms outstretched to the heavens as only he could. One of the female arrancars was going to ask who he was but he yelled it before they had a chance to ask. "I am The One and Only LORD VON KIINGGG!!!" He yelled at the sky with his arms still out like he was asking for a hug from god. His voiced caused yet another shockwave.

"Are you ready for the most Fantastic Overpowered Show there is? Huh I can't here you People!! Louder people." He begun to screech, "I say LOUDER!!!" the two female arrancar just decided to play along with this freak and the let out a weak yes.

He smiled and readied his zanpaktou in the way the lead guitarist in a band would put on their guitar. Raised his strum hand to the heavens once more and readied his fingering hand on his frets.

The right hand came down with god's judgment and hells repute as he played the lick with masterful skill an prowess when it came to impressing the females it failed fully they were gone by the time he got one minute into it but he didn't stop he continued his song with this boast. "My music must have been much to powerful for their tainted ears only the gods can understand true mastery can you hear me gods?” He looked to the heavens while playing, "CAN YOU HEAR MY UNGODLY SKILL? YOU ARE ENVYOUS OF MY SKILLS ARN'T YOU GODS? WHICH IS WHY YOU CAN’T SPEAK?" He yelled at the top of his lungs, HE laughed at the gods who can only stare in awe at his skills.

[Shinigami Kyra]

First off, lawlz at the name. Secondly, good personality. I like it. You picked a theme, and you stuck to it from top to bottom, very good. Thus, I can see you put a lot of time and effort into this profile, so I'm going to be as helpful as I can in aiding your approval.

First, I would like to suggest a spell check. There's just some minor shit that should be fixed; nothing too big, really, but it'd be helpful (you can do that while you edit what's next on the list).

Secondly, you have quite a lot of songs; 8 in total, each one being quite unique. Now, while you do seem to explain the actual songs themselves (how they would sound, and so forth), you don't go into as much detail in some spots as you should on how it affects your foe/attacker. How strong each attack, or defense is, what their limits are in accordance to power or strength, and so forth.

Now, going back to the total amount of songs, eight in all, you also have three unique abilities, one that happens to be in constant use. While I may allow that constant ability because it fits the theme of your character, I will certainly not be able to accept a profile with a character who has nearly eleven abilities, not even including natural Arrancar abilities. Six is normally the limit we like to have; three for pre-transformation, three for Ressurrecion. We have the same sort of limitation for Shinigami, with three Shikai, and three Bankai. Some may have more, some may have less, but for a basic application, people just starting out, or average-based players, we suggest to sticking to that limitation.

So, my suggestion would be this; have your three basic, non-song related abilities in your non-released state, and have your Ressurrecion be your songs. That is simply a suggestion, you don't 'HAVE' to do it, you can split it up if you'd like. Still, we suggest trying to keep a limit on the amount of abilities a character has, especially when each ability effects a character in a unique way. We understand if a character may have multiple techniques, more than three in some cases, but for the most part, all basically do the same thing, just slightly different.

Also, get rid of the Flash-Cero. Natural Arrancar powers are the basic powers that all Arrancar basically have. While some Arrancar have their own unique natural powers (i.e., different ways of summoning their Cero), I would suggest getting rid of the Flash-Cero.

On a final note, I suggest re-reading your application in general. There are a lot of grammar errors that make it difficult to read, or understand, i.e., mostly in the history and your sample post. Such problems can be avoided by either pre-writing it out in Word, which sometimes can catch the obvious mistakes, or simply re-reading each paragraph as you write it out.

[dmass]

Well hope i followed your advice well enought to suffice just let me know if there are any more problems

[Shinigami Kyra]

This has been pre-reviewed; corrections given in Xat PC. Post a reply when the proper edits have been made.

[dmass]

fixed (on of my friends said i should add don to hi name...)

[Shinigami Kyra]

Song 1: song of pleasure. Its anything but pleasure this song is a hell on earth. Their effects are devastating to the surroundings and to lord he. Long slow power chords one after another. Its a constant barrage of Sinfonía Negro If he uses this move in succession he will become highly fatigued. It’s a fast pace rapid-fire riff of metal proportions

What are its actual effects? You don't really say... all you say is that it's a hell on earth. Elaborate; it's too vague.

Song 2: The last dance part one. This song creates a dome (100 ft around think about it) barrier that causes a vibration sensation when you touch. The harder you touch the more it vibrates your body you hit it too hard you may pass out. This wall is easily taken out by a spiritual attack from anyone but the wall stay will up otherwise or until you beat the king. The song starts off at mid-tempo electric yet clean ending in slow smooth acoustic sounding end.

So... am I to assume it's similar in appearance to Tosen's Bankai? I'm not saying you're copying, I'm just trying to take visual similarlities. So, when you touch the dome, it hurts you? I don't really understand the point of this; does it surround the King himself and his opponent? How is it summoned? Elaborate a bit more =\

[dmass]

as for the 1st thing it was in there it is just a Rapid barrage of Sinfonía Negro

and for the second thing yes if he hits it he is hurt as well but he could bring it down and i elaborated on it a bit more

[Shinigami Kyra]

Approved; High Level-Weak