With the Captains suffering casualties and heavy injuries on their side, all hope seemed to be lost... until Shinji Hirako appeared, along with the rest of the former Shinigami. Though the aid of the Vizards certainly helped to draw the battle in their favor, it seemed Aizen's power alone proved too much for them.
Name: Krion Tsutrekin Age: 167 (looks 22) Gender: Male Personality:
Krion is very laid-back, dislikes hard work (unless there is something in it for him), and enjoys hangging out with friends (especially over drinks). He plays the piano, but prefers listening to rock music. He flirts constantly, but is in no way a pervert. He enjoys fighting, and hums to himself when in the heat of battle, regardless of how intense the fight is. He always has to have his hands busy, so he can be found doing a puzzle or reading.
Appearance:
Krion stands at an incredible 6' 2". He is muscled, but not bulky, weighing at about 190 lbs. He always his hands in front of him doing something. His hair is a mess of tangled brown curls, adding almost 2" to his height of 6'2". His eyes are a brilliant sapphire blue, with small pupils. He has a tattoo of an eagle on his right shoulder blade, and one of an ice crystal on the back of his left hand. His back is marred by a scar extending from his left shoulder to his right hip. He has a pair of silver headphones hanging off his robe. He wears sandals when walking a sizable distance, but is always barefoot when around home.
Zanpakuto Spirit:
His zanpakuto spirit is one of an black eagle, nearly the size of a himself, with white outer feathers. It's name is Aisu Washi, and he has the ability to speak, and has a bit of a temper. He is also quite petty, and will ignore you if you annoy him. His inner world is a high mountaintop, and a cave is where Krion spends his time there.
Sealed Zanpakuto:
The sealed form is a 3' 2" katana, with a white and green wrapped hilt. The guard is a wheel shape with three spikes around it.
Shikai Description:
Freeze over, Aisu Washi, is the release phrase. The sword melts into a brilliant blue glove around his right hand. Any liquid body of water deprived of spirit energy, up to four feet from him, freezes.
Shikai Abilities:
Ice Shield-A solid teardrop shaped shield, tall enough that when set on the ground, the top of the shield’s curved section (with spikes) is at his shoulder, and three spikes on the curved end. Its spikes and sharp end have cutting edges. When struck by an exceptionally powerful blow, it can crack, or even shatter, leaving him opens for several minutes while the ice regenerates. It can take several hits, but an equal blow will shatter the shield. It is especially susceptible to fire and plant based attacks, despite their power level.
Krion arrived in District 16 after being killed in a car wreck. Disliking the others, annoyed by their false sense of superiority, he tried to avoid people and took to climbing high buildings to get a view of the Seireitai. He desperately wanted to become a soul reaper, desiring to put the stuck-up members of the higher Districts in their place. Running to the wilderness at the edge of the Rukongai, he escaped the bars of that group. He was in the forest for many years, near fifty. He honed his strength and speed, eventually discovering his natural tendency for the manipulation of spirit energy. He hunted for his food, learning the law of the jungle the harsh way, when a pack of wolves stole the deer he had killed, but not before giving him a nasty scar across his back. He was able to tame a wild eagle, which he used in a crude form of falconry to hunt for food. He left the wood, making powerful strides for the Spiritual Arts Academy. While there, along with acquiring his Zanpakuto, he met his best friend, Naikin Leit.
RP Sample:
"I am sooo bored..." said Krion, throwing the puzzle book at the wall of his room, throwing his head back and running his hand through his hair.
"I am going to get something to drink." he said stepping quickly out of his room, and turning down his street. He had gone not ten feet from his room when he heard some glass object shattering on the other side of the wall. His hand shot to the hilt of his sword, ready to draw it. Leaping over the wall he found himself standing over a small, confused looking girl with long, frizzy brown hair. His best friend, Naikin Leit. Removing his hand from the sword, he pulled Naikin up to her feet.
"You know, I can't keep pulling you off the ground when you fall." Krion said, picking the shard of what looked like a glass bowl and fruit salad.
"I know, I know.” she said, brushing watermelon off her robe.
"Come on; let's go get a drink.” he said, putting a hand on her shoulder, a wide grin on his face.
"But, the salad..."
"Leave it.", he said pulling her by the hand toward her favorite bar.
Last Edit: Sept 23, 2009 16:56:45 GMT -5 by ansem495
Post by Rebel Raven on Sept 22, 2009 21:36:40 GMT -5
Hello, I'll be reviewing your application.
"The sword melts into a brilliant blue glove around his right hand. Every body of water around him freezes over."
This is worded too powerfully. What's around him in terms of radius? What, exactly, constitutes as a body of water? The Water in the air? The water in the blood of people? An ocean a hundred miles away? The water based attacks of other people?
Basically, this is gunna need limitations, and a good defining.
"Ice Shield-A solid teardrop shaped shield, with the curved end at the top of his arm, and three spikes on the curved end. It's spikes and sharp end have cutting edges." How large is the shield? Does it regenerate? What happens when someone more powerful hits the shield? What hpapens if weaker people hit this shield? What happens if people on an equal tier hits the shield?
This needs more detailing.
"Aisu Washi Hanayaka-The glove extends up his arm and ice wings grow out of his back. He can actually fly with them. Everything around him freezes over."
A little close to Hitsugaya here aren't we? And every shinigami outside the academy, and equivalent of other groups are assumed to have the ability to stand on air, and thus, fly, so another mode of flight is pretty redundant.
Also, how large are these wings?
"Everything" freezes over? The air? Opponents? Himself? It needs more elaboration.
"Ice Needle Storm-The wing grows more ice loosely around the wings. Krion flaps the wings, and thousands of ice shards fling away from him."
Any idea of just how big these needles are?
Again, any armor needs some elaboration on the protective power they offer.
"He was placed in Squad 8, and entered as a 12th Seat. He is currently a 7th Seat." I'd like this little snippet removed. Having a declared seat is a bit much.
Also the History is a little sparse, and could be longer to allow for more milestones in his life.
All in all, a lot of things need more details to them, and this is reinforced by the fact you seek a bankai.
You, see, the more powerful you want to be, the more we expect out of an application in terms of length, and detail. To be able to use Bankai is a guarenteed high level on the tier, so we need a more detailed application to "earn" the privillege of Bankai.
I will say this, though! I do like the RP sample though. It's not the usual fight scene we get in apps, and it shows the nature of your character. Also the personality, and appearance are well done.
Post by Rebel Raven on Sept 22, 2009 22:48:30 GMT -5
you can edit this application and post once more in this thread when the application's edits have been completed. We prefer applications be edited so we don't have a lot of threads for each character.
Personality: Krion is very laid-back, dislikes hard work (unless there is something in it for him), and enjoys hangging out with friends (especially over drinks). He plays the piano, but prefers listening to rock music. He flirts constantly, but is in no way a pervert. He enjoys fighting, and hums to himself when in the heat of battle, regardless of how intense the fight is. He always has to have his hands busy, so he can be found doing a puzzle or reading.
Appearance: Krion stands at an incredible 6' 2". He is muscled, but not bulky, weighing at about 190 lbs. He always his hands in front of him doing something. His hair is a mess of tangled brown curls, adding almost 2" to his height of 6'2". His eyes are a brilliant sapphire blue, with small pupils. He has a tattoo of an eagle on his right shoulder blade, and one of an ice crystal on the back of his left hand. His back is marred by a scar extending from his left shoulder to his right hip. He has a pair of silver headphones hanging off his robe. He wears sandals when walking a sizable distance, but is always barefoot when around home.
Zanpakuto Sprit: His zanpakuto spirit is one of an black eagle, nearly the size of a himself, with white outer feathers. It's name is Aisu Washi, and he has the ability to speak, and has a bit of a temper. He is also quite petty, and will ignore you if you annoy him. His inner world is a high mountaintop, and a cave is where Krion spends his time there.
Sealed Form: The sealed form is a 3' 2" katana, with a white and green wrapped hilt. The guard is a wheel shape with three spikes around it.
Shikai Form: The sword melts into a brilliant blue glove around his right hand. Any liquid body of water deprived of spirit energy, up to four feet from him, freezes.
Shikai Abilities: Ice Shield-A solid teardrop shaped shield, tall enough that when set on the ground, the top of the shield’s curved section (with spikes) is at his shoulder, and three spikes on the curved end. Its spikes and sharp end have cutting edges. When struck by an exceptionally powerful blow, it can crack, or even shatter, leaving him opens for several minutes while the ice regenerates. If hit by a weaker, or equally leveled blow, the ice withstands the blow.
History: Krion arrived in District 16 after being killed in a car wreck. Disliking the others, annoyed by their false sense of superiority, he tried to avoid people and took to climbing high buildings to get a view of the Seireitai. He desperately wanted to become a soul reaper, desiring to put the stuck-up members of the higher Districts in their place. Running to the wilderness at the edge of the Rukongai, he escaped the bars of that group. He was in the forest for many years, near fifty. He honed his strength and speed, eventually discovering his natural tendency for the manipulation of spirit energy. He hunted for his food, learning the law of the jungle the harsh way, when a pack of wolves stole the deer he had killed, but not before giving him a nasty scar across his back. He was able to tame a wild eagle, which he used in a crude form of falconry to hunt for food. He left the wood, making powerful strides for the Spiritual Arts Academy. While there, along with acquiring his Zanpakuto, he met his best friend, Naikin Leit.
RP: "I am sooo bored..." said Krion, throwing the puzzle book at the wall of his room, throwing his head back and running his hand through his hair.
"I am going to get something to drink." he said stepping quickly out of his room, and turning down his street. He had gone not ten feet from his room when he heard some glass object shattering on the other side of the wall. His hand shot to the hilt of his sword, ready to draw it. Leaping over the wall he found himself standing over a small, confused looking girl with long, frizzy brown hair. His best friend, Naikin Leit. Removing his hand from the sword, he pulled Naikin up to her feet.
"You know, I can't keep pulling you off the ground when you fall." Krion said, picking the shard of what looked like a glass bowl and fruit salad.
"I know, I know.” she said, brushing watermelon off her robe.
"Come on; let's go get a drink.” he said, putting a hand on her shoulder, a wide grin on his face.
"But, the salad..."
"Leave it.", he said pulling her by the hand toward her favorite bar.
Post by Rebel Raven on Sept 23, 2009 4:19:06 GMT -5
Please edit the original application post with the changes you've made. then make one more post letting the staff know that the applicaton has been updated.
Post by Rebel Raven on Sept 23, 2009 16:33:25 GMT -5
" If hit by a weaker, or equally leveled blow, the ice withstands the blow."
I don't like how that can potentially be abused. That rather large shield can be used asn an excuse to block a lot of things, and it has no particular weakness aside from someone of a higher power tier striking it.
