new shinigami

[krow]

Name: Krow Tsubashi
Age: 180 looks 16
Gender: Male
Personality:

Krow is a very laid back kind of guy and a little lazy. He doesn't really care about the rules but will follow them just so he doesn't have to hear anyone's mouth. Krow is a bit of a flirt and at times can be a bit of a pervert. He loves music and always has a pair of headphones with him. While kind hearted, he loves to fight. When he fights he seems to dance more than anything else. But when he is enraged, he fights like a savage beast.

Appearance:

Krow stands at an impressive 5 foot 10 inches. He is slim and weighs about 180 pounds. He may look skinny but he has a very athletic build. He is always slouched over making him look an inch or two shorter than he really is. His hands are always in his pockets or simply hanging by his sides. His hair is black, spiky, and has red tips. Some of it falls over his eyes, partially covering them. His eyes are a deep, crimson with slits for pupils. Under each of his eyes are two black teardrop birthmarks. His skin is a light caramel color from always being in the sun. He wears the standard uniform, but has the sleeves ripped off. Around his neck his a pair of black and white headphones. On his hands are black fingerless gloves. He doesn't bother to wear shoes and prefers to go around barefoot.

Zanpakuto Spirit:

Krow's zanpakuto spirit takes the form of a giant white wolf, about the size of a horse. Its eyes are a deep amber color. Its name is Koori Ookami. It has a feral look to it at all times and always seems to be eyeing you like you were dinner. It has the ability to speak but it only does on rare occasions. Its world is a frozen tundra. The sky is pitch black. The only thing visible in the sky is a multi-colored full moon. In the middle of the tundra is a cave. This is where Krow spends most of his time.

Sealed Zanpakuto:

Its sealed form is a simple katana with a few modifications. Its hilt is wrapped in a black and blue criss-crossing pattern. The guard is a wolf's head in mid-howl. Coming out of its mouth is a serrated blade, about 2 feet long and an inch wide. The blade is a beautiful silver color that seems to glow in the moonlight.

Shikai Description:

Freeze the world, Koori Ookami, is its release phrase. Krow holds out his zanpakuto before bursting it with rietsu. The zanpakuto shatters before reforming. Its hilt remains the same except for a 12 inch white wolf tail that hangs from it. Coming out of the wolf's mouth is a light blue blade. It is 5 feet long and 6 inches wide. Unlike the rest of the sword it was transparent, making the blade look like it was made out of crystallized ice.

Shikai Abilities:

Icy chill- Whenever he swings his zanpakuto a flurry of ice crystals explode out to the enemy at a maximum range of 20 feet. The weakness of this technique is that if someone of equal power were to coat them self in riestu they could block the attack. It is also easy to dodge and gets slower the further away the target is.

Frozen Armor- Krow is enveloped in a Frozen suit of armor one inch thick and is protected from close physical attacks such as punching or kicking. His opponents attacks are softened by about 30 percent. The armor molds itself over Krow's body covering everything except for his head, making him look like a walking ice sculpture. After 3 or 4 hits the ice begins to crack. If someone of greater power were to attack the armor would completely shatter after 3 hits. The attack will only lose 10 percent of its original power. Any lost armor will regenerate slowly over time. Krow can increase the time needed to regenerate by adding more of his riestu into it. Doing so greatly drains him and is only used as an emergency. Any fire based attacks will melt the armor. The downside to this move is that if its used for to long than Krow will begin to freeze.

Bankai Description:

Bankai Abilities:

Skill Level: Kidou: Beginner
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Advanced
Skill Level: Shunpou: Advanced
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Intermediate
History/Background:

Krow grew up in the world of the living with his mother and little brother, Ikki. He was a loner and only had a handful of friends. He usually hung out in his room listening to his music. It was his dream to become a professional singer. When he was sixteen he decided to enter his schools talent show. He was extremely nervous because it was the first time he ever tried singing in public. Right before he started singing, some sparks flew from some faulty wiring. The sparks caught on the nearby curtains and quickly spread. Krow was trapped on stage and couldn't run and he was burned alive. He watched his funeral and wasn't surprised that only a couple people showed. For 3 months he spent his time watching over his family and some friends, singing whenever he got bored. He was singing to himself when he was attacked by a hollow. He ran as far as he could but the hollow caught up to him. Just as he was about to be eaten a shinigami with long blonde hair appeared and killed the hollow. All he heard the man say was, "Pathetic.", before his world dissappeared in a flash.

When he arrived in Soul Society he was all alone. He swore that he would find that man and show him how pathetic he was. Krow grew up in District 33, fending for himself the best he could. Over the years he trained himself so that when he finally found the man that sent him there he would come out on top. One day when he was walking down the street he saw a little blue haired girl looking around for someone. Before he could say anything a figure picked the girl up and placed her on his shoulder. What he saw made him gasp. It was the same man he had been training to defeat all these years. Krow charged with a cry before being swatted on his back. He instantly jumped to his feet and attempted another assault on the man. Again he was flung to the ground. The man started to laugh which only infuriated Krow. The man left, but not before leaving him a message. "Get stronger, kid. When you do ask for Zetsuhi."

RP Sample:

"Today is an awesome day." said Krow with a smile on his face. He was walking down the street when he heard some music playing. "I gotta check this out."

When he found who was playing the music he was awe struck. Sitting under a tree was a beautiful girl with a flute in her hands. Her eyes were shut simply flowing with the music. She had dazzling brown hair and tantalizing sun-kissed skin. When she was done she looked up and looked Krow in the eyes. Krow didn't know what to do and blushed.

"Hi there. My name's Krow Tsubashi." he said with a smile.

"My name is Nami Kazuki. It's a pleasure to meet you." she said with a smile of her own.

"Same here. I'm sorry to intrude but that was a beautiful song you were playing." said Krow.

"Thanks. I usually play by myself, but it was nice to have an audience for once." said Nami

"I wouldn't mind listening to you play some more." said Krow with a cheesy grin.

"Okay. Here goes nothing." she said before playing again. When she was done she looked up see Krow's reaction. She giggled at the face he was making. The two talked more and really started to like each other.

"Wow, it got late quick. I guess we better start heading home." said Krow finally noticing how dark it was.

"Bye Krow-kun." waved Nami.

"Talk to you later, Nami." said Krow before walking off. He never noticed the blush on Nami's face.

[Rebel Raven]

Hello, I'll be reviewing your app.

This app is well done, and overall, I only have a few problems.

There's absolutely no menton of his life in the Soul society.

And
"Burning Aura- Krow is enveloped in a burning aura and is protected from close physical attacks such as punching or kicking. the downside to this move is that if its used for to long than Krow will over heat"

Protected how, exactly? Just that anyone getting close risks being burned or is it an armor that blocks attacks, or does the aura deaden the blunt force from those attacks?

and
"Infernal Fang- Krow's blade is set ablaze. Whenever he swings his zanpakuto a flurry of flames erupts out to the enemy. The weakness of this technique is that if someone of greater power were to coat them self in riestu they could block the attack, only getting minor burns."

I could use some more details like the range of this attack.

[krow]

Sorry bout that. I'm still kinda new to this. I made the changes and hopefully it's good enough now.

[Rebel Raven]

You're going to have to take out the mentions of Kenpachi as it's completely unfair to expet his player to remember your character.

The burns are a bit too strongly worded. You can't guarentee damage, really, coz some people will be too strong to harm.

[krow]

There you go

[Rebel Raven]

"Infernal Fang- Krow's blade is set ablaze. Whenever he swings his zanpakuto a flurry of flames erupts out to the enemy at a maximum range of 20 feet. The weakness of this technique is that if someone of greater power were to coat them self in riestu they could block the attack, only getting minor burns.

Burning Aura- Krow is enveloped in a burning aura and is protected from close physical attacks such as punching or kicking. His opponents attacks are softened and they recieve second degree burns. The downside to this move is that if its used for to long than Krow will over heat."

The Burns are too strongly worded, STILL.

You make it seem like there's absolutely no defense to prevent being burned when there's going to likely be many people stronger than him.
That makes them godmodey, especilaly the fire aura which might include swords since you don't offer a range on it.

[krow]

I changed to moves so that they wouldn't cause instant damage. if there's still anymore problems with them i'll just scratch the whole fire idea.

[Rebel Raven]

You may have to scratch the fire idea. I have problems, still.

"Infernal Fang- Krow's blade is set ablaze. Whenever he swings his zanpakuto a flurry of flames erupts out to the enemy at a maximum range of 20 feet. The weakness of this technique is that if someone of greater power were to coat them self in riestu they could block the attack."

I don't like the fact that someone of higher power is the only sort of person that can block this ability.

"Burning Aura- Krow is enveloped in a burning aura and is protected from close physical attacks such as punching or kicking. His opponents attacks are softened. The downside to this move is that if its used for to long than Krow will over heat. The aura only surrounds Krow, not his wepons or anything he touches."

How far does this extend from him?

I see nothing in this that allows a grace period against being burned from any of the fire abilities.

[krow]

I've changed the powers and i think it should be fine now. If you got problems just do your thing.

[Rebel Raven]

"Frozen Armor- Krow is enveloped in a Frozen suit of armor and is protected from close physical attacks such as punching or kicking. His opponents attacks are softened. The downside to this move is that if its used for to long than Krow will begin to freeze."

The same problems exist here as with the fire armor, cept for the burning.
How hard is it, does it regenerate, how much softening does it create, what's it look like, what are it's weaknesses, etc. We need details.

You can't just plop down a complex, potent power and expect it to be just taken on this board. We have to be vigilant of powers that can be abused, and prevent those from going through.

Armor, by far, is one of the most abusable abilities among those that aren't outright forbidden.
We need to know as much as we can about it.