Sayu Sabaku(Done)

[Manny]

Name: Sayu Sabaku
Age: 101
Gender: Female
Personality:

Sayu is a Flirt. A huge flirt and is bi. She loves to mess with people and tease them with her nice breasts. She loves to meet new people and hates easy going guys. She also hates waiting for anything. Her favorite food is nachos. The only people she respects are captains and assistaint captains. She also loves to spar,Learn things, train and drink tea.

She hates when people outsmart her. She loves to sleep and sometimes she is very lazy. She loves pepermint tea and she admires Capain unohana Retsu. She does not like to stand in line and she for some reason hates the line "Remember that day". Overall She is the Friendly type and she fears Quincy. She is very sarcastic. She also has a soft side for some shinigami.

Appearance:

Thats Sayu,

Sayu looks like a teenage girl. She has pointy ears and silverish hair. She has a nice shaped body and she wears the basic shinigami uniforms. she is a tall girl 5'9 she weighs 126 lbs. She has nice breast a nice body and graceful green eyes.

In gigai she wears a blue and black outfit she made at her home. A black skirt right above the knees, a blue and gold jaket the ends at the foot and black gontlets. She has black leg wear. She keeps her zanpakuto in her hands and she has a two rings a blue one and a black one. one on the blue on the middle and black on the index.

Zanpakuto Spirit:

Kaosu(Chaos)- Kaosu Looks like a man 20-25 years of age. He is dark skinned and he has silverish hair. He thinks he is the shit and no one can touch him. He hates everyone including Sayu. He thinks no one is worthy of his powers. He is around 6'0 172 lbs he always has a sarcastic smirk on his face when sayu talks to him.

Inner world- Sayu's inner world is a garden with all of the flowers. Rose, Four leaf clover ect..., It has a chair in which Kaosu sits in. It also has a large castle like building for kaosu.

Sealed Zanpakuto:

Her sealed zanpakuto is a basic katana. It is all black and it has an oragnge dragon on the sheath. The hilt is black as well as the sheath. It has a silver gaurd. Fire type.

Shikai Description:

This is a Fire type zanpakuto. The Sealed zanpakuto turns all red. It then has a red gaurd,hilt, and blade. The command is "Hail Kaosu".

Shikai Abilities:

1.Kaosu wave- Sayu points her Zanpakuto and it Makes a Fire snake appear with the command "Bite koasu". This attack goes both ways bacause sayu has a habbit of firing from point black range. This has a heat of four hundred degrees fahrenheit. This can be controlled with the hilt of the zanpakuto. This attack takes a large amount of spirit evergy to use and it is very hard for sayu to control.

Bankai Description:

The Shikai goes from a red slim blade to a curved blade. It turns all grey and a purple Beast is on the blade. It is all grey. It has bandage on the hilt and the gaurd is round with little spikes on it. The command is (honoo sune-ku of oujou) Flame snake of death.

Bankai Abilities:

1.Kaosu Strike-This attack makes an even larger version of her shikai appear. This creates an eight headed snake of inferno. These snakes are huge and each one is eight hundred drgrees fahrenheit. This attack takes up a large amount of sayu's spirit energy and has high destructive power. This can be controlled with the hilt of the zanpakuto. This attack can only be used once a thread. This is very hard to control.

Kaosu bakufuu(Kaosu blast)-Sayu fires a massive fire ball from her zanpakuto. this is done by sayu pointing her bankai at the opponent and chanting "bakufuu". This takes a massive amount of spirit energy to use and it leaves a unbareable pain in Sayu's hands.

Skill Level: Kidou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Beginner
Skill Level: Shunpou: Intermediate
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Advanced
History/Background:

Sayu was born in a small poor village where every corner she turns there was someone who got killed. Sayu Grew up being ignored and no one ever listend to her warnings they just told her to go to her room as a result more people died. Sayu started to see ghosts and she told her mom but the mom did not listen. Sayu then saw with her own eyes her sister killled by a hollow and she screamed "HELPP". Her parents came and saw both her daughters killed they cryed and lived the reat of their lives in pain.

Sayu became a konpaku and walked the streets and one day "BOOMA" a Hollow attacked and a shinigami came and stabbed it in the head. He then purifys Sayu and she goes to the spirit world crying "Mommy mommy".Five years later she trains at the shinigami academy and becomes a shinigami she meets Unohana who she admires and says "Hello captain im Sayu" Unohana nods and says "Hello im captain Unohana retsu". Sayu smiles and walks away to continue her training.

Two more years later Sayu is relaxed and yamamoto is dead sayu can't spend time with anyone due to her work. Sayu then walks off saying ill get stronger. She then obtains a zanpakuto and began training in kido and swordsmanship. She then trains with soifon in hand to hand. A few years later she trained in shunpo and masters it she then begins to try and obtain shikai and fails once.
She then walks off saying "Ill never fail again....".

She then becomes a shinigami with out a division . She trains and advances her kido even more and befriends many shinigami . She even went as far as to make some of them breakfast in bed. Sayu then leaves and begins her shikai training and killing more Hollows as well as training in her weakest point swordsmanship.

One day there was a Menos Gillian attack and the shinigami were not ready. Sayu was told to stay back. many shinigami were killed and sayu could do nothing about it. she felt rage inside. The menos powers up a cero and a shinigami takles sayu out of the way the menos fires killing three shinigami. sayu then draws her zanpakuto and charges the menos but is knocked back. Her head starts to bleed. The other shinigami says "STAY BACK". Sayu ignores and says "Hado 4 Byakurai", She fires lightning at the menos but it is too weak to hurt the menos. It then powers up another cero but a a captain comes and kills it. Sayu says "Thank you captain zaraki". Sayu then walks away saying "Im still weak got to get stronger".

"Faster"

"Smarter".....

RP Sample:

Sayu walks into the training grounds and says "im here to train". A shinigami comes up to her and says "Im here to fight you". Sayu says "So hahaha you weakling". The shinigami grunts and charges. Sayu says "No speed whatsoever man". The shinigami gets angry and swings his wooden sword.

Sayu frowns and ducks and grabs his neck "Gaaa" The shinigami says. Sayu giggles and kicks him back "Your worthless dude" sayu says and then she takes out her wooden sword and smacks him with it "If you want me get stronger". sayu then begins to walk out singing "The wheeles on a bus go round and round all through the town".

Sayu then enters her house takes a seat and starts to eat nachos and wispers to herself" Am i still weak?.....". Say then walks and gets in the bed and is soon fast asleep.

[aeria]

Ummm...

If you would like a serious review, please post. Otherwise...

LoL.

[Shinigami Kyra]

for example licking her fingers and rubbing her nipples

Keep it PG13 there, buddy <_< We got younglings on 'dis h'r bo'rd

*nod nod*

Take it to d'ah smuttiez board

[Manny]

Oh, Im sorry thanks for telling me, I took that part out.

[Ai]

For personality, I would like to expand a bit more on her perspective on things, you have a lot of likes and dislikes listed, but nothing truly defines her disposition.

Also, the Shikai...

this attack turns Sayus shikai into a whip like red vine and it drains Spirit energy once it attacks.

If you mean the targets reiastu, then no. We get a lot of people trying to pull of the absorption bit with attacks, and it is often metagamed and godmoded when actually used in practice. So no. I'll say the same in regards to the Bankai as well. What I see in both is strength but not really anything to balance it out in regards to weaknesses.

For the History, some things have to be altered, such as her encounters with various Canons you've mentioned. Like Unohana, it's alright that she crossed paths one day with her they both exchanged introductions during a casual moment, that's not really a big deal. It's also not a big deal that your character admires her, she's the Captain-Commander after all, a lot of Shinigami likely do, BUT I will caution you not to bind your character to her as if your close acquaintances, that's a no no. An example of such things you have in your History already, such as:

A few years later she trained with Byakuya in shunpo and masters it she then begins to try and obtain shikai and fails once.

That's a no no, bear in mind, some people play these characters and automatically binding yourself to them is sort of rude as if its forcing yourself into their storylines without permission. Also, Byakuya is not the sort of guy that just goes around training people in his techniques - he hasn't even done that for those closest to him.

This here:

She then joins and helps out the 4th divison under captain kotetsu. She trains and advances her kido even more and befriends Isane.

Is also a no no, for the same reason I stated before in regards to binding yourself to other peoples characters. It just isn't kosher.

Overall, I'd like to see you add some more detail to the character, flesh her out a bit more, and add some weaknesses/balances to her abilities - perhaps even her personality; while also expanding on her History a bit more and also removing the parts of being trained by those two canons.

[Manny]

There i made all of those edits,Done ^^

[Ai]

Mid Level Weak
(No Bankai, get involved with some storylines, get around, in time, then it may be a possibility.)