Joshua Dragoona

[dragoona11]

Name: Joshua Dragoona
Age: 150
Gender: Male
Personality:

He has a very uniqur personality rich with different veiws. He himself is quite a self sacrificing sort if he needs to be. This doesnt seem to completely fit his personality. In trueth he has a rather deep thought process and can completely go overkill and overthink it all. And so sometimes he does foolish things. As such he has a great sense of humor about life and doesnt care how it goes as long as he can fight. Hes firce in a fight and his only goal is to draw blood from his opponent. He goes to extremes to do this and is almost always succesfull. This is due to his firce and persistent style of fighting that leaves opponents searching for a way to sucesfully defend against him. He also has a slight masicistic attitude not really caring wheather he gets cut and actually enjoying it just a tiny bit. Outside a fight hes doesnt talk much. He likes to recite things hes read from time to time.

Appearance:

As is required to those not of luitenant or captain rank he wears the black shinigami robe. Though he really dislikes it quite a bit. He is decently tall and his body has a decently large look to him. His face is thin and his eyes are almost sinister. His eye color is grey and his hair is cut short and brown. All in all he looks kinda average. He has a scar crossing his face going under his eyes and across his nose on both side of his face forming an X. His body is covered in numerous scars. Most are hidden by his clothing and are the result of harsh training and his zanpacktous abilities. His hands are quite large and there being no fat on his hands makes them look thin. He wears sandals and socks like other soul reapers but his zanpacktou sits inside the arm of his robes. The left arm to be more precise. It hides and fits perfectly inside

Zanpakuto Spirit:

Voodo is a huminoid like cloaked figure wearing a skull mask. Its extremely thin and carries itself with an extremely fearfull presense. Joshua really doesnt like it when he puts all his SP upon Joshua when they talk. He cant take the things his mind are filled with. Nightmares even he cant avoid. He has fears just like anyone. But really they have nothing to do with battle..or so he hopes. Voodo livesw in a literall graveyard. Tall headstones and masoliums are everywhere and as such he travels quite a bit. He has much information about things that some would assume a spirit shouldnt know...but unknown to Joshua this zanpacktou has been around for a very long time and has had many masters. None were able to keep up with voodo...till Joshua at least. Voodo's voice is hollow and aged sounding as well as slow and patient. He and Joshua talk quite a bit and can get into arguments quite easily.

Sealed Zanpakuto:

A completely black wakizashi. It has a small chain about 10 feet long and quite ting attached to a small metal loop at the hilt of the blade.

Shikai Description:

Release Phrase:Drink there blood and make them feel pain Voodo

The blade must also be sheathed when this happens.

Shikai Appearance: Joshua Shikai looks like a scythe that has had its staff section cut in half making it around four feet long. The pole part looks aged and battered and is metal. The blade is long and curved just like a scythe is and it seems to have small chips in it but is insanely sharp. two inches below the blade is another identical blade. This makes actually hitting an opponet easier. The bottom end of the scythe extends into a rope that is fed into his robes. When his zanpacktou changes the sheath also changes becoming a spool for the length of rope attached. The spool can slowly drag in excess and it is easy for Joshua to stop its rewcall without hurting himself. He can manipulate the speed of withdrawl as well. The rope has a good 40 foot range.

Shikai Abilities:

If blood is drawn at all even a little bit the scythe quickly absorbs it and turned completely black. At this point and damage to the owner of the zanpacktou gains an extrodinary ability. Anything donw to him is also done to the person whos blood was absorbed. All damage done to Joshua is done to the other person. It requires the blood to connect the two. And only one person can be attached at a time.

the ropes length can be extended and retreived at will and at wichever spee is wished. The weapon still have to be caught and all witch can make out witch speed its returned.

Bankai Description:

Bankai Abilities:

Skill Level: Kidou: Beginner
Skill Level: Swordsmanship: Advanced
Skill Level: Shunpou: Advanced
Skill Level: Hand-to-hand: Beginner
History/Background:

At the beggining of his life he had no idea what he would become. He was just another person. But deep down like most people. He wanted to change his life. Have his own little adventure. And so he grew up trying to look for a way to have an adventure in his life. And as such he quickly learned...it was impossible. In this day and age if your not rich you cant adventure without dissapointing others....or in some way losing your own life. And he was forced into a desk job...to keep up his own family. But his thoughts were dark and he hated his life sitting at a desk everyday all day doing the same repetative crap just to barly scratch by. He was barly able to find time to keep his body in shape and had no time to date. He just wasnt very lucky in life. And then his freinds took hold of what life he had and turned it around. He got a raise and a better office. He was able to start having a life. And thats when the worst possible thing he could think of happened. A begrunged employee came in after being fired and took out the whole place. He then figured out a little about after death. He and his other coworkers stood around watching the man go at a massacre. And they just broke down mentally. It was horrible. And Joshua couldnt get enough of this. He hadnt really minded the bullets peircing him. He would have liked revenge though...and he got it. The man was shot down by the guards and entered his own little spirit world. Joshua grabbed him and beat him sensless down the stairs and into the streets. Him and his coworkers were having there own little war out in the streets. And thats when the hollow appeared. Much stronger than simple spirits they attacked. They all ran and yelled..and the screams. They sent shivers up his spine. He ran and ran. And was cornered. He turned ready to fight to his death. And thats when the shinigami appeared. Killing the hollow and losing a few of there own. In the end he thanked them and they grudingly sent him to soul society.

He appeared there in a forest. He was insanely hungry when he fell there. He thought the after life wouldnt have something such as that...hunger. He could smell some good food. And was drawn to a bandits camp. There he asked for some food. They laughed at him and then challenged him to a fight. He took the cahllenge more out of hunger than anything. One on one with a member who drew a dagger against him and stabbed at him. The blade moved quick and pirced his side. Joshua flinched for a second and then kicked him hard in the side. The bandit fell and Joshua drew the dagger from his side. He stabbed the bandit and killed him. He didnt take much from the wound though the bandtis ran away in a fearful stupor beleivng him to be a living dead. He wasnt he just didnt care that he had gotten stabbed. Food came first. After getting some food he wandered through the forest again. And thats when he felt it. True fear. It near crippled him and he was dropped to his knees. He couldnt beleive this feeling of power. He found its source. A small wakisashi. He could then feel and hear it calling for him. Beconning him towards it. He picked up the blade and sheath and the force stopped. He cpouldnt really figure it out. As such he travvelled throughout this strange new world for days, weeks, years. He travelled and gained power. He fought many for food as a way to stay fed. He was alwyas hungry. And then one day...he heard a voice.

The voice was cold and explained to him what it was and where he was. It explained that he was to gain enough power to make a difference before he would ahve been spoken too. This voice came from his blade. It told him he needed to see who he was to see if he was trustable and now trusted him with its name. Voodo. And as such it told him to seek out the soul society to get stronger..so that he could complete a mission for the sword. Joshua found this a little strange but had heard of people in the soul society gotei 13 that were quite strong. And so he went out to find this wonderfull place. It didnt take him long before he found it. He decided it was time to go through this. He made it threw the academy quite well but slacked in kido skills. Either way he gained a fearfull reputation. For his fighting style. And he was quite close to his sword talking much with it.

RP Sample:

Joshua tried to stand. But the force was too much. He couldnt move barly. Images of unspeakable things ran through his head. Then...it all stopped and a voice filled it with its hollow and cold words "Boy...wake up.." and when he opened his eyes. He could tell right away he was in a graveyard. And what stood before him could be death itself. Maybe this eemingly second life was a falsity. A sweet fruit taken away by the very fact that he was dead. And nothing but nothing came from death. The creature before him must have known what he was thinking. "No boy..this is not the after life..but true life..you probably will never understand this. But besides that. Here is what you need to know. You have been chosen by me to help me execute a plan ive been concocting for years. All you need to know is that you need to become one of the gotei thirteen. Once I beleive you are ready I will release more information. I beleive you will find doing this all to be quite fun. "

Joshua listened to the spirit and began to go through hsi mind what this all meant. Maybe it WOULD be fun. A few good fights. He didnt know where this lace was. But he needed to get there. Maybe this was the adventure he had always been looking for. He nodded in agreement with the spirit and then he spoke. "So...if im to follow you...shouldnt I at least know what ill gain from this?..or at least your name.?"

The spirit almost seemed to smirk..and then spoke. "Yes..that would be something youd need wouldnt it? Well...while drawing me from my sheath and calling my name along with the key words..ill transform and ull gain supernatural abilities. Your foes will feel pain as you feel it. But i must drink there blood to do this..and the key words are. Drink there blood and make them feel pain...then you call my name...Voodo"

Joshua smiled "So this is it...I understand...and I accept this...ill do your bidding..it sounds like an adventure and thats something ive always wanted to have...so..im yours.." Joshua stood up..and was suddenly back in the forest holding the blade. And for the finale time he heard the words of the blade. "Now it is time for you to get stronger. Then you will seek the gotei 13...that is your first mission." Joshua looked around for another way to go and found a way out of the forest. He began to get hungry again. He needed to find food. Then he would continue getting more power for his blade.

[Shinigami Kyra]

Firstly, I would kindly ask you to spell check your application, as there are several spelling errors that make the overall application far too difficult to understand.

Personality: For instance; "In trueth he has a rather deep thought process and can completely go overkill and overthink it all." I have no idea what you're trying to say here at all. And while you open up the personality with; "He has a very uniqur personality rich with different veiws," you don't really go into any detail over uniqueness at all, you just sort of mimic any power hungry character, one that almost seems to mirror Kenpachi's own.

Appearance: Lots of Grammar and Spelling errors here.

Zanpakuto Spirit: "Joshua really doesnt like it when he puts all his SP upon Joshua when they talk" no idea what that means. Also; "He has much information about things that some would assume a spirit shouldnt know...but unknown to Joshua this zanpacktou has been around for a very long time and has had many masters" is denied. A Zanpakuto only has a single master, and is born from their Shinigami (aside from Toshiro and that movie character). As such, a Zanpakuto can't be older than the Shinigami. Also, remove the 'knows things that other spirits wouldn't,' as it would seem far too OP probable. No Skull mask, and no 'Hollow' appearance/sound/abilities. These are Shinigami, not Hollows or Vizards.

Sealed Zanpakuto: I highly doubt that a ten foot sword can fit in his sleeve -_- I also highly doubt you read anything in relation to the Guide about Zanpakuto and their sealed state. As such, I suggest reading the Guide before making the required editing. More description as well.

Shikai Description: I see more similarities to Zaraki; "The blade is long and curved just like a scythe is and it seems to have small chips in it but is insanely sharp" So, like Zaraki's constant released Shikai, his blade is also chipped? So, he has a bunch of scars, is built in some sort of 'large' form with no real other description than that, has almost a mirrored personality, and now his blade is also aged and chipped from fighting, just like Zaraki? "The spool can slowly drag in excess and it is easy for Joshua to stop its rewcall without hurting himself." No idea what the heck this means; if it's an ability, it shouldn't be here.

Shikai Abilities: Denied; now I know what character you're trying to do. Hidan from Naruto, Shippuden. Absolutely not. Not only do you not have any sort of limitation to this attack, but it's far too OP, and obviously, a copy-technique, not original in the least. Power denied; come up with a new one, do not edit. "the ropes length can be extended and retreived at will and at wichever spee is wished. The weapon still have to be caught and all witch can make out witch speed its returned." No limitation? So, can it wrap around the world six times? Can it travel beyond the speed of light?

History: I ... don't even know what to say to this. He gets stabbed but obviously it means nothing to him as he takes the knife out and stabs the bandit who obviously is defenseless now? Obviously, your newborn spirit is far stronger than a large group of bandits who would just leave their man behind and not totally gang up on the person; I highly doubt they would even agree to a one on one fight, then run away, any bandit for that matter. Zanpakuto discovery? Is this all in the same day? Far too convenient. Shinigami in Academy have to spend YEARS obtaining their Zanpakuto and learning their name, and this newborn spirit does it in less than three hours?

Fix the above mentioned, THEN I'll get to your sample post.

[dragoona]

lol i really didnt think this would work...its just a copy paste form another site..ill make a new one shortly just let me write it up.



but first...your judgment on a few things were wrong...its a ten foot CHAIN and a wakizashi....wich can easily fit up ones sleeve....i also dont know if i caught you at a bad time cause you completely thrashed everything without thinking completely about it...maybe thats just what i saw. ....anyways this guys scrapped...a new dragoona will take his place...

I hope i didnt sound like a jerk and i dont wish to question your abilites as an admin. You obviously do a great job considering your site servives quite well. My one piece site isnt doing so well right now...school gets in the way of so much stuff for the memmbers .......

OH i do hav e a question though....this is more anime theology than anything...but why is it that if an anime charecter uses an ability once if anyone tries to use it again there shot down...a good example is gaara. I was rping sand abilities like his WAY before the anime came around and now im called a copy cat

but in the case of this charecter Hidan was definatly the muse. Sorry bout that..

[Shinigami Kyra]

Considering the above statement, I shall lock this thread and move it to archives.

In accordance to the powers in question, I would simply state that it is true that it is unfair if one were to come up with a certain character with certain abilities, only to find out that it is later created, or already has been, by another anime. The reason behind the rejection is due to the fact that we need to draw the line at some point. If we allow one person to have one ability from another Anime, where's the line from drawing Sasuke's eye thingy, or Goku's Kaiken, or spirit bomb? One could make the same arguments in an attempt to get away with it.

Long story short, this is a Bleach Board. There are ways of interpreting various abilities to fit the Bleach Universe. The only way one will be able to do so is if they put the effort into not only converting, but changing some aspects in order to make it their own.

I will admit that I must have missed the chain being ten feet versus the entire sword. Nevertheless, as you have stated, this is a copy from another site. That being said, most of what I stated pretty much stands; there's a certain format that can be found within the Applications Guide that needs to be followed in order to produce an acceptable application.